Question

【題目】Chen Yifan, the student from a local senior high school, hit a BMW car parking along the street when he was passing by on a bicycle on February 4, leaving the rearview mirror broken and several scratches over the body of the car.

Chen left a letter of apology to the car owner, together with an envelope of 311 yuan he had earned from part-time jobs during the winter holiday. He put them at the inside of a door handle.

The car owner surnamed Xue found the letter and cash the next day and got so touched by Chen’s honesty. With the help of local police Xue located the student on February 10 in the hope of returning the money. He told the police that he also wants to fund Chen’s education if the family cannot afford it.

On February 11, Chen’s mother, after knowing what her son had done, voluntarily contacted Xue trying to compensate for the repair of 13,000 yuan. But Xue turned her down firmly.

The next day, Xue’s daughter visited Chen’s family with a grant of 10,000 yuan for his education.

【寫作內容】

1. 用約30個單詞寫出上文概要；

2. 用約120個單詞發(fā)表你的觀點，內容包括：

（1）如果你是那位中學生，你會怎么做？你又如何看待這位車主的行為？

（2）如何理解“窮有信、富而仁”這句話？

【寫作要求】

1. 寫作過程中不能直接引用原文語句；

2. 作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學校名稱；

3. 不必寫標題。

【評分標準】

內容完整，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當。

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Answer 1

【答案】Chen Yifan and his mom decided to pay all they could afford for compensation after Chen accidentally bumped into a parked BMW. Moved by his deed, the car owner declined and offered to sponsor Chen’s education.

Chen has really set a good example to our fellow Chinese students. Though he could have left the scene unpunished, he decided to shoulder the cost of repairs. Meanwhile, that car driver Xue didn’t pale in comparison with the boy. Contrary to the common reaction when their cars get scratched, Xue displayed a high degree of tolerance and compassion, which contribute to the harmony of the story.

As far as I am concerned, such harmonious relationship between them shows great advances in social morality. Despite the difference in wealth, the inferior should always put honesty in the first place, and those who enjoy a better life should show more empathy with the inferior.

【解析】讀寫任務型寫作分為兩部分：

第一部分要求用約30個詞概括所給短文的要點，文體主要以議論文，記敘文或說明文為主。

第二部分以約120個詞就短文某一主題談論自己的經(jīng)歷并發(fā)表看法。此項旨在著重考查學生學習英語的綜合能力，特別是閱讀寫作以及思維的能力。

我們就第一部分，具體談一下解題步驟。

第一部分要求學生能讀懂文章，在讀懂的基礎上概括文章要點，所以閱讀能力和概括能力要求較高。

本文是故事性閱讀材料，寫文章概要的時候,應該用最簡練的語言來說明故事講述了什么，還可以講述該故事給你的啟示(inspiration) 或其中的一個道理(principle)。主要內容一般應包括四個方面：

1. 什么人？(Who)

2. 發(fā)生什么事情？(What happened)

3. 目的如何/原因是什么/方式怎樣？(Why/How)

4. 結果如何/什么啟示或教訓？(Consequence/Inspiration/Lesson)

在這幾個方面中，所占內容比重最大的是what，考生最容易犯的錯誤就是把what寫得太詳細。當然，不是說每個故事概要都包含how或why，有時兩者選其一即可。

所以，就本文第一部分要求，我們可以簡單列出如下四要素，然后找出文章中的要點：

1. Who—Chen Yifan and his mom

2. What happened—decided to pay for compensation

3. Why—Chen accidentally bumped into a parked BMW

4. Result—the car owner declined and offered to sponsor Chen’s education

列出了要點之后，我們就可以用自己的話將要點組織起來，概括成一段通順文段了。

【本文亮點】寫作內容1：本文僅用兩句話便將人物、事件、起因和結果表述的非常簡潔清楚。第一句用了帶有時間狀語從句的復合句，交代了事件的起因。第二句是一個簡單句，此處用一個過去分詞短語moved by his deed作原因狀語，惜字如金，用的巧妙。全文共36個字，符合題目要求。

寫作內容2：文章開門見山，Chen has really set a good example to our fellow Chinese students，點題到位。句式長短錯落，并列句、狀語從句和定語從句的使用恰如其分，表意清晰。Though, meanwhile, contrary to, as far as I am concerned, despite…等詞的使用，使文章十分緊湊而有條理，內容完整，字數(shù)恰當，是一篇好文。