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【題目】The news that Li Tiejun, a father in the southwestern city of Luzhou, had his nine-year-old daughter drop out of school and homeschooled her for 11 years has aroused heated discussions online. It is reported that about 18,000 Chinese children are educated at home. With more parents and education experts dissatisfied with the current system, do you support home schooling for your child? Below are the selections of the opinions from the netizens.

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Li is a hero. But at the same time, it has to be pointed out that he was and is not the ideal teacher for his daughter. She can’t possibly learn about physics, chemistry and biology from an elderly man with no formal higher education. I wish his daughter all the success in life that she may wish to have.nit666

I was homeschooled until I was about 12. In Australia, we have a remote school option for people who live away from the cities. We were taught through mail. I would say that you can learn as much knowledge as people in a school. My life were much happier without the kind of academic pressure.

【寫作內(nèi)容】

1. 用約30個單詞寫出上文概要；

2. 用約 120 個單詞發(fā)表你的觀點，內(nèi)容包括:

(1)支持或反對家長自己在家教孩子的做法；

(2)用 2-3個理由或論據(jù)支撐你的觀點。

【寫作要求】

1. 寫作過程中不能直接引用原文語句；

2. 作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱；

3. 不必寫標(biāo)題。

【評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】

內(nèi)容完整，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)。

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Answer 1

【答案】With the availability of educational resources, home schooling is an option that is becoming more and more attractive to parents nowadays. However, some people support it while others do not.

I am strongly against this practice. Home schooling is not allowed in our country because it is compulsory for parents to send their kids to schools for an all-round education. In addition, the biggest drawback of home schooling is a lack of interaction with others. The social experiences at school are very essential to enable a child to fit into the competitive society. Homeschooled children may lose many chances to compete with their peers. What’s worse, learning outside a school environment can consume a lot of mom’s or dad’s time, which can be a big challenge for families to balance their budget.

In short, it is necessary that children should be sent to public or private schools for formal schooling.

【解析】這是一篇讀寫任務(wù)類的書面表達。要求學(xué)生在讀懂所給材料的基礎(chǔ)上，概括所給材料并發(fā)表自己的看法。這對學(xué)生的理解總結(jié)概括能力有很高的要求。第一部分是對所給材料的概括，而不是詳細描述文章內(nèi)容，而且所給字?jǐn)?shù)為30個左右，所以最好做到一句話概括文章內(nèi)容，一句話點出文章揭示的現(xiàn)象或哲理。此外，要求考生根據(jù)所給提綱發(fā)表個人觀點，這屬于半開放式表達。學(xué)生可以根據(jù)實際情況，自由的發(fā)表自己的看法。在該部分中，學(xué)生要注意用具體理由和論據(jù)來支持自己的觀點。

【亮點點評】這篇范文最出彩的地方是第一段，簡潔明了的概括了所給內(nèi)容。此外，文章中采用了一些高級詞匯，例如：availability，compulsory，drawback，essential，competitive，consume等。定語從句（that is becoming more and more attractive to parents nowadays，which can be abig challenge for families to balance their budget），主語從句（that children should be sent to public or private schools for fonmal schooling）等也應(yīng)用的非常合適。另外，however，in addition，what’s worse，in short等的使用使文章上下文連貫自然。