Question

11．假定你叫李華，參加了一個(gè)在倫敦舉辦的冬令營．在閉營式上，請你代表全體營員發(fā)言．請根據(jù)以下提示信息，寫一篇英語發(fā)言稿．
1．得到了寄宿家庭的悉心照顧；
2．提高了英語水平；
3．參觀了名校（如：牛津大學(xué)，劍橋大學(xué)）和名勝古跡．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右，開頭語已為你寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
2．應(yīng)適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的地名、校名和人名；
4．提示詞：牛津大學(xué)Oxford University劍橋大學(xué)Cambridge University
Dear friends，
I'm Li Hua．I feel greatly honored to be speaking here on behalf of all the Camp members．First I'd like to express our sincere thanks to all the teachers and host families here who have given us a lot of help both of in life and study．（高分句型一）
During the past few weeks in London we had a wonderful time and achieved a lot．The host parents took good care of us，which made us feel at home．（高分句型二）And with the help of the teachers here we have made great progress in English．Meanwhile，we have known more about western history and culture after visiting so many places of interest．What's more，the visit to some famous university，such as Oxford University and Cambridge broadened our horizons．（高分句型三）
Thank you so much!．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假定你叫李華，參加了一個(gè)在倫敦舉辦的冬令營．在閉營式上，請你代表全體營員發(fā)言．請根據(jù)以下提示信息，寫一篇英語發(fā)言稿，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：得到了寄宿家庭的悉心照顧；提高了英語水平；參觀了名校（如：牛津大學(xué)，劍橋大學(xué)）和名勝古跡．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：on behalf of代表；take good care of悉心照顧；feel at home感到輕松自在；with the help of the 在…的幫助之下；Meanwhile同時(shí)；What's more而且；
First I'd like to express our sincere thanks to all the teachers and host families here who have given us a lot of help both of in life and study．（高分句型一）
The host parents took good care of us，which made us feel at home．（高分句型二）
What's more，the visit to some famous university，such as Oxford University and Cambridge broadened our horizons．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear friends，
       I'm Li Hua．I feel greatly honored to be speaking here on behalf of all the Camp members．First I'd like to express our sincere thanks to all the teachers and host families here who have given us a lot of help both of in life and study．（高分句型一）
       During the past few weeks in London we had a wonderful time and achieved a lot．The host parents took good care of us，which made us feel at home．（高分句型二）And with the help of the teachers here we have made great progress in English．Meanwhile，we have known more about western history and culture after visiting so many places of interest．What's more，the visit to some famous university，such as Oxford University and Cambridge broadened our horizons．（高分句型三）
       Thank you so much!

點(diǎn)評 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．