Question

3．假定你是高三學生李華．上個月月初你在網(wǎng)上買了一雙鞋．但是，收到貨后發(fā)現(xiàn)存在若干問題．請你就此給賣家寫一封投訴信．
要點如下：
1．介紹購物情況；
2．反映存在問題；
3．提出解決方案．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Dear Sir/Madam，I am one of your customers．I ordered a pair of shoes for my mum as a gift on Women's Day．To my disappointment，there are the following problems．
To begin with，it didn't arrive on schedule，which missed the Women's Day．（高分句型一）Besides，not only is it the wrong size but it is also of wrong color．What bothers me most is the quality of the shoes．（高分句型二）They are not made of genuine leather，which give off bad smell．（高分句型三）（反映存在問題）I am not satisfied to have received such poor service，and I am qualified to ask you to handle it．I hope you can either return my money or deliver a new pair to me．（提出解決方案）
Looking forward to your reply．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息 假定你是高三學生李華．上個月月初你在網(wǎng)上買了一雙鞋．但是，收到貨后發(fā)現(xiàn)存在若干問題．請你就此給賣家寫一封投訴信．寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：介紹購物情況；反映存在問題；提出解決方案．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：To my disappointment令我失望的是；To begin with首先；on schedule按時；Besides另外；not only，but （also）不僅而且；give off發(fā)出；Look forward to盼望；
To begin with，it didn't arrive on schedule，which missed the Women's Day．（高分句型一）
What bothers me most is the quality of the shoes．（高分句型二）
They are not made of genuine leather，which give off bad smell．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Sir/Madam，
       I am one of your customers．I ordered a pair of shoes for my mum as a gift on Women's Day．To my disappointment，there are the following problems．
       To begin with，it didn't arrive on schedule，which missed the Women's Day．（高分句型一）Besides，not only is it the wrong size but it is also of wrong color．What bothers me most is the quality of the shoes．（高分句型二）They are not made of genuine leather，which give off bad smell．（高分句型三）（反映存在問題）I am not satisfied to have received such poor service，and I am qualified to ask you to handle it．I hope you can either return my money or deliver a new pair to me．（提出解決方案）
        Looking forward to your reply．
                                                                                                                                                                                                      Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                      Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．