Question

Passengers are banned from eating and drinking on subway trains, according to a regulation recently released by Nanjipg's transport authorities·Under the new rule, passengers should not eat or drink in subway cars, though they are still allowed to eat at the stations. The Metro operators will first warn and then fine violators between 20 yuan to 100 yuan.

The regulation caused a strong reaction of the whole society and started a heated discussion.Supporters say that passengers who eat on trains annoy others with unwanted smells and make messes with spilled food or beverages(飲料）. However, some others believe otherwise, saying that　the fast pace of big cities squeezes people's time and makes it hard for them to -get a proper meal. Authorities should be more tolerant of those who need to dine on the train.

【寫作內(nèi)容】

1.用約30個單詞寫出上文概要；

2.用約120個單詞發(fā)表你的觀點，內(nèi)容包括：

(1）支持或反對這個規(guī)定；

(2)用2-3個理由或論據(jù)支撐你的觀點。

【寫作要求】

1.可以支持文中任一觀點，但必須提供理由或論據(jù)；

2.闡述觀點或提供論據(jù)時，不能直接引用原文語句；

3.作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱；

4.不必寫標(biāo)題。

【評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】

內(nèi)容完整，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)。

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

范文 (支持)

Nanjing’s transport authorities have recently declared a total ban on eating and drinking on subway trains. Those who violate the regulation shall be fined. Citizens’ opinions on the rule vary from person to person.

Personally, I am in favor of the rule. To begin with, eating and drinking on subway trains may annoy other passengers and the subway staff, as food and drink may be spilled or give out an unpleasant smell. Only by forcing the riders not to eat can we improve the carriage environment and relieve the staff of increasing workload. Furthermore, remains of food, unless taken away, will attract mice and other pests, which eventually brings risks to the subway operation. In this case, the eating ban on trains is a must to ensure smooth operation.

In short, this new regulation will ensure us a safe and wonderful travel experience. Moreover, by kicking the habit of eating on the subway, the passengers will develop a more civilized way of taking public transportation.

(反對)

According to a regulation issued by Nanjing’s transport authorities, passengers are prohibited from eating or drinking on subway trains. It has generated considerable discussion in society. People’s opinions over it vary.

I am strongly opposed to the rule for the following reasons. First of all, the society should show more tolerance towards the passengers eating on the train. Due to their tight schedule, they have no choice but to take advantage of the time on the subway for their meal. In addition, some people like those with diabetes do need to eat food at particular times to control their sugar level. It is improper for the authority to fine them for their eating behavior. Last but not least, the regulation is funny in that there should be food stores inside some subway stations!

In short, not only will the regulation bring much inconvenience to passengers, but it will also spoil the reputation of the subway.

【解析】

試題分析：本次作文是次開放性作文，難度較大，但同時給考生提供了較大的展示空間，考生的創(chuàng)新、發(fā)散思維的能力能夠得到充分的發(fā)揮。文章要點：1.概述上文。2.提出觀點。3.論述觀點。因為論述的是目前的情況，故基本時態(tài)應(yīng)定為一般現(xiàn)在時。

亮點說明：范文要點全面、結(jié)構(gòu)明晰（總結(jié)題文（簡述現(xiàn)狀）-提出觀點-論述觀點），用語準(zhǔn)確，文章中的“To begin with, Furthermore, In short,Moreover/ First of all, In addition, last but not least 等”過渡詞的使用，使得文章過渡自然。且文章句式多變，展現(xiàn)了作者較高的英語水平，提升了文章的檔次。例如定語從句“Those who violate the regulation shall be fined.”,動名詞作主語“eating and drinking on subway trains may annoy other passengers and the subway staff,”,狀語從句的省略“unless taken away”/非謂語作后置定語“According to a regulation issued by Nanjing transport authorities”倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)“Not only will the regulation bring much inconvenience to passengers”.這所有的一切成就了一篇好文章。