Question

你是一名高三年級(jí)學(xué)生。你發(fā)現(xiàn)班上有些同學(xué)晚上學(xué)習(xí)到深夜，白天也不安排休息時(shí)間，但往往課堂上昏昏欲睡；有些同學(xué)飲食習(xí)慣不好，不吃早餐。請(qǐng)你寫(xiě)一篇發(fā)言稿，在班會(huì)上勸同學(xué)們合理安排作息時(shí)間，注意健康飲食，保證學(xué)習(xí)好、身體好。
注意：1、發(fā)言稿須包含上述要點(diǎn)，但可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，使講話完整通順。
2、100詞左右。
Dear classmates,
It’s a pleasure for me to have a chance to make a short speech today.
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Answer 1

Dear classmates:
It’s a pleasure for me to have a chance to make a short speech today. Recently, I have found that some of our classmates study late into night and do not spare any time to take a rest during the day either, but they often cannot help falling asleep in class. And some classmates seldom have breakfast, which is also a bad habit and will surely do harm to their health.
In my opinion, it’s extremely important for us to have enough sleep and proper diet. We must learn to make wise use of our time, and only in this way can we keep fit and study well.
Thank you for listening!

試題分析：本題是一篇材料作文。作文要求寫(xiě)一篇發(fā)言稿，發(fā)言稿必須包含材料所給的要點(diǎn)。寫(xiě)作時(shí)，分段要合理，句與句之間要銜接緊密，做到連貫通順。主要分為兩部分，第一部分描述現(xiàn)象；第二部分提出自己的建議。注意人稱和時(shí)態(tài)的正確使用。
亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：It’s a pleasure for me to have a chance to do...是發(fā)言常用的句式。范文使用第一人稱，比較親切、客觀和有說(shuō)服力。范文使用了較多的連接詞，像Recently, but, And, In my opinion等，語(yǔ)意連貫，句與句銜接緊密。短語(yǔ)make a speech, spare time, do harm to, learn to, make use of等的使用，使范文的內(nèi)容較為充實(shí)。范文使用了較多的重點(diǎn)句型，像It’s a pleasure for me to have a chance to do..., 賓語(yǔ)從句I have found that..., cannot help doing, 非限制性定語(yǔ)從句which is also, 倒裝句型only in this way等。重點(diǎn)語(yǔ)法像定語(yǔ)從句、倒裝等的使用，會(huì)給作文增色許多。