Question

【題目】假如你是李華，你們學(xué)校最近開展了創(chuàng)建“平安校園”的活動。你們班為此組織主題班會，請你用英語寫一篇發(fā)言稿，談一談你對如何創(chuàng)建“平安校園”的一些想法。短文應(yīng)該包括下面的內(nèi)容：

1、安全意識的重要性；

2、在運動中要注意安全；

3、在校內(nèi)同學(xué)間發(fā)生矛盾時，一定要保持冷靜、理智；

5、逐步將“平安校園”活動轉(zhuǎn)化為全體師生的實際行動。

注意：

1、不要逐句翻譯，可適當增加細節(jié)使行文連貫；

2、詞數(shù)120個左右；

3、文章開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

Safety at school

My dear classmates，

There is no denying that safety plays an important part in our daily life. Recently our school has carried out a program aimed at making our campus a safe place to stay on.

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Answer 1

【答案】

My dear classmates,

There is no denying that safety plays an important part in our daily life. Recently our school has carried out a program aimed at making our campus a safe place to stay on.

I consider this as indeed a good practice, which will make us aware that safety should always come first in our daily life, whether when we stay at school or outside it. When we are doing sports, we should attach importance to the safety and avoid being hurt. Furthermore, when we get into trouble with our classmates, we should remain calm and avoid any form of fighting, which may only bring suffering and pain to us mentally and physically.

As far as I’m concerned, I feel all the students and teachers should work hard and creatively to keep the “safety at school” activity in mind. Besides, we supposed to observe the law discipline where we are at any moment.

Thanks.

【解析】

試題分析：本篇書面表達屬于應(yīng)用文，根據(jù)題中所給要求寫出對建設(shè)“平安校園”的想法。寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確有哪些要點。2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象。要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫。本文寫作時可以從幾個方面來寫對建設(shè)“平安校園”的一些想法。3、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)。 4.注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點。

【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了大量短語。比如 plays an important part in，carry out，aim at，attach importance to。文章還使用了大量高分詞匯denying，furthermore，discipline等。I consider this as indeed a good practice, which will make us aware that safety should always come first in our daily life, whether when we stay at school or outside it此句中連用的兩個從句為文章增色不少。