Question

【題目】閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞以上的英語(yǔ)短文。

In the past, if I had to look away from my phone, I felt like I was going to die. When I had lunch with my family or dated with my friends, I couldn’t resist replying to a text message or checking my Facebook, WeChat on the mobile phone. Before long, it was easy for me to get tired. The more I texted during the day, the poor my sleep was. I couldn’t even focus on my study.

My friend told me that people who can’t help checking their phones all day are known as Phubbers (低頭族). Phubbing trends not only to involve the young people, but also the elderly. Soon, I noticed a Stop Phubbing campaign site had been launched. I found the slogan of the website as follows: stop twittering, stop posting photos…enjoy your food, enjoy the music and respect your campaign.

Thankfully, I realized there was actually an outside world. My divided attention could keep me from what is truly important. Now, I can use the phone without feeling like a drug addict. I have more time to enjoy real-life activities. Use your cell phone and don’t let it use you.

【寫作內(nèi)容】

1.用約30個(gè)詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容。

2.用約120詞就“拒為低頭族”的話題談?wù)勀愕南敕ǎ瑑?nèi)容包括：

1）你周圍有低頭族嗎？他們成為“低頭族”的原因。

2）成為“低頭族”給學(xué)習(xí)和生活帶來(lái)的影響。

3）就如何“拒為低頭族”提一些建議。

【寫作要求】

1、作文中可以使用親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2、作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名。

【評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】

概括準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，語(yǔ)篇連貫。

Answer 1

【答案】

One possible version:

According to the passage, the author was addicted to playing mobile phone and it affected his normal life. However, Stop Phubbing campaign helped him realized the importance of the real life and he could use phone reasonably.

Nowadays, we can see many people are watching their mobile phones in subway, restaurants, elevators, roads and so on. There is no denying that people who like the mobile phone are concerned about its attractive functions. Phubbers can’t stop sending messages, surfing on the Internet, listening to music and even taking photos by using the mobile phone. Moreover, some people have less time to relax themselves. They make use of the time when they are on the way to school or other places to play mobile games.

However, phubbing disturbs not only our study but also our life. On the one hand, phubbers waste lots of time playing cell phone games and sending messages, particularly in class. Other people also complain they are disturbed when phones ring in classrooms. On the other hand, it canlead to health problems. For instance, using a mobile phone on the sofa can cause back and neck pain.

As far as I am concerned, it’s high time that we threw away the phone and raised our heads up.Do cherish everything around us and appreciate the scenery ahead of us. What’s more, we should do more exercises and take part in real-life activities. In a word, only when we use the phone reasonably, can we realize the happiness of life.

【解析】

試題分析：本次作文為提綱作文。寫作對(duì)象為“低頭族”。因其要求部分有要進(jìn)行總結(jié)的英語(yǔ)短文，故作文難度加大。題文要求該篇作文的要點(diǎn)為：題文英語(yǔ)短文的概括；現(xiàn)象及原因；影響；建議，寫作方向明確，但具體內(nèi)容需要仔細(xì)構(gòu)思。文章針對(duì)的是目前的一種現(xiàn)象，故基本時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：該篇范文出色地完成了寫作任務(wù)，要點(diǎn)全面，條理清晰，表述清楚明了。其語(yǔ)言的使用地道準(zhǔn)確，尤其是連接性詞語(yǔ)的使用精妙恰當(dāng)讓文章行云流水，而其句式的運(yùn)用也有很多可以借鑒之處，例如：句式“There is no denying that”(無(wú)可否認(rèn)的是)，動(dòng)名詞作主語(yǔ)“using a mobile phone on the sofa can cause back and neck pain. ”，倒裝“In a word, only when we use the phone reasonably, can we realize the happiness of life.”�？傊�，該篇文章體現(xiàn)了該考生出色的語(yǔ)言功力。