Question

【題目】In the past, the expression "children should be seen and not heard" summed up the attitude of parents to heir children. Children were expected to be disciplined, well-behaved and the parents ruled the home. But today parents seem to do everything for their children and control all aspects of their lives. Some call this overparenting. Parents take charge of everything: from what pre-school their kids attend to the pastimes they take up. Parents feel they must protect their children to increase their chances for success. As a result children do less than ever before.

There are two reasons for overparenting. First, people now have fewer children than in years past so they can give each one more attention. Secondly, parents feel the future of their family is now dependent on only one child, so they must do as much as possible to help their child succeed.

But overparenting has negative consequences. Children are less independent now and are protected from the hardships and failures that teach them determination and give them the satisfaction of accomplishment. Also the pressure kids feel to be successful means they experience more anxiety and depression than ever before.

〔寫作內(nèi)容〕

1.以約30個(gè)詞概括這段短文的內(nèi)容；

2.然后以約120個(gè)詞表達(dá)你對(duì)“父母過度照顧子女”這一現(xiàn)象的觀點(diǎn)。內(nèi)容包括：

(1)以你自己或他人成長(zhǎng)的某次經(jīng)歷，說明父母過度照顧對(duì)子女的影響；

(2)表達(dá)你在此方面對(duì)父母的希望或建議。

［寫作要求］

1.在作文中可使用自己的親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2.作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。

［評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)］ 概括準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫。

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Answer 1

【答案】

Because parents are having fewer children, they increasingly feel the need to control the lives of those children. As a result, many children are becoming less independent, determined and ambitious than in the past.

Parents today discourage their children from doing housework, extracurricular activities and socializing because they fear it will interrupt their education. For example, when I was younger I wanted to learn the guitar but my parent wouldn’t allow me because they believed it would distract me from my studies. They are happy as long as I perform well in my exams but they don’t seem concerned about how I develop as a person.

To some extend, I understand parents’ concerns, but I think they should love their children for who they are, not what they want them to be. We deserve the chance to chase our own dreams and learn on our own. Even if we fail, we can learn from those failures.

【解析】

試題分析：寫作時(shí)要考慮以下幾個(gè)方面：（1）層次結(jié)構(gòu)，（2）句子的時(shí)態(tài)（3）內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)。尤其是內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)要把握準(zhǔn)確到位，要點(diǎn)需要考生拿捏準(zhǔn)確以及正確，因?yàn)?/span>只能使用5個(gè)句子表達(dá)全部的內(nèi)容。又要包括所有的要點(diǎn)，考生要注意盡可能使句子的表達(dá)形式多樣化，適當(dāng)?shù)氖褂靡恍└呒?jí)句式和高級(jí)詞匯，以提高書面表達(dá)的檔次和可讀性。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】本篇作文層次清晰，要點(diǎn)全面，表達(dá)流暢，切合作文要求，句子結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確，信息內(nèi)容完整，篇章結(jié)構(gòu)連貫。文中使用連接詞和插入語(yǔ)，如To some extend, For example, As a result等， 使文章語(yǔ)言流暢自然，為文章增色，而且還使用了一些高級(jí)詞匯及句型。