Question

【題目】假定你是學(xué)生會主席李華，學(xué)校將舉行每年一次的18歲成人儀式，請你給外教Steven寫一封電子郵件邀請他參加活動。內(nèi)容包括：

時間：3月12日上午9點至11點

地點：學(xué)校大禮堂

對象：全體高三師生和家長

活動意義：內(nèi)容自定

注意：1.詞數(shù)100詞左右；

2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3.開頭語已為你寫好。

參考詞匯：成人儀式coming-of-age ceremony; 禮堂auditorium

Dear Steven,

I would like to invite you to the annual Coming-of-age Ceremony of our school._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Steven,

I would like to invite you to the annual Coming –of –age Ceremony of our school. As you know, it’s very important for us because from that moment on we are no longer children but adults, which means we should have a sense of duty for our society. Therefore, we will treasure the moment forever.

As scheduled, the ceremony, which is to take place in the school auditorium, will start at 9:00am on March 12. And it will last for two hours. And we will make an oath together, show our thanks to our parents, and put on wonderful performances, singing and dancing during the ceremony.

All the students in Senior 3, accompanied with their parents and their teachers will be present.

I am looking forward with great pleasure to seeing you. We do hope you can come.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】這是一篇電子郵件，文章內(nèi)容已經(jīng)列出，在寫作文時應(yīng)注意以下幾點：

1.通篇應(yīng)用一般現(xiàn)在時。

2.要點應(yīng)齊全，但不可對要點進行簡單羅列，要用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞使全文流暢，銜接自然。

3.注意語氣。寫作難點在第四條上，要寫出成人禮的意義，要符合現(xiàn)實并且一定要通過簡單的例子來支撐，否則會顯得說服力不夠，內(nèi)容不夠豐滿。這部分可以采取簡單句與復(fù)合句結(jié)合的辦法。

【范文亮點】：

采用非限定性定語從句（it’s very important for us because from that moment on we are no longer children but adults, which means we should have a sense of duty for our society；the ceremony, which is to take place in the school auditorium ）等高級句式。

采用as you know, therefore,and等連詞，使文章連貫順暢。

結(jié)尾語氣自然，符合信件結(jié)尾要求。