Question

【題目】假定你是李華，你在國外購物網(wǎng)站購買的智能手機出現(xiàn)了故障。請你向廠家寫一封投訴信，要點包括：

1.出現(xiàn)的故障； 2.對售后服務的不滿； 3.你的要求。

注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右； 2.可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear Sir/Madam,

I'm writing to complain about the quality of your product.

As a faithful user of your products,I feel confident about the quality of your smartphones.However,I have been bothered recently,as the smartphone I am using crashes quite often.It is very annoying.When I am making a phone call or receiving a call,it stops working.I called the after-sales service,only to be told the problem might be caused by the overuse of the phone.In fact,I never played any games on the phone,I just went through a few e-book pages or read online news!

My requirement is that the phone be repaired as soon as possible or be replaced.

Looking forward to your early reply!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】思路點撥：試題為應用文中的書信寫作，試題只給出寫作框架，并未給出所有的具體寫作細節(jié)，為提綱式作文。寫好此文，需注意三點：一是寫信格式要準確，信的開頭已經(jīng)給出，但要寫好信的結尾。二是要詳略得當，本文應重點寫手機使用中出現(xiàn)的故障及表達自己的不滿。三要注意適當?shù)卦黾蛹毠?jié)，恰當?shù)厥褂眠B接過渡詞，以使行文連貫。

寫作亮點：文章要點齊全，寫作層次清楚，能緊扣要點框架適當?shù)卦黾蛹毠?jié)，行為連貫。句式多變，單句與復句交替使用，能夠正確使用復合句。如使用狀語從句：When I am making a phone call or receiving a call, stops working.使用非謂語的被動式作結果狀語：I called the after-sales service, only to be told the problem might be caused by the overuse of the phone.表語從句My requirement is that the phone be repaired as soon as possible or be replaced.使用轉折連詞However。使用一些詞組，如：complain about，feel confident about，Look forward to。