Question

閱讀下面新聞,然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。

A young man was slapped in the face until he bled because he didn’t offer his seat to a woman with a baby on a bus in downtown Hangzhou. Later he was proved to be a disabled person.

In a series of cases nationwide, we see people being beaten for refusing to give up their seats on public transport, which seems to be a moral problem about correct behavior and self-sacrifice.

People without morals (who don’t give up their seats to deserving people) can be condemned, but they don’t deserve to be treated with violence because they offend moral values and not laws. In comparison, the attackers behave worse.

The attackers regard relying on violence as their only choice if people ignore their appeals to give up their seats. It seems they start a shout or a fight for the sake of justice, but can they still think of their personal intention when they call violent justice?

This “violent justice” can confuse many people and encourage them to do the same, especially when we are overpowered by illogical mood.

If cruel and rude acts are rooted in children’s hearts, society will never step into civilization. The practice violates common values, neither solving problems nor safeguarding civilized society.

1. 以約30個詞概括短文的要點。

2. 以約120個詞談?wù)勀銓�這一事件的看法,內(nèi)容包括:

(1) 讀完這則新聞,你有什么感受?

(2) 假如你是車上的一名乘客,你會怎樣做?

(3) 就如何創(chuàng)建和諧社會提出你的建議。

1. 你可以使用實例或其他論述方法支持你的論點,也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容,但不要抄襲閱讀材料中的句子。

2. 作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學校名稱。

Answer 1

The news is about a young disabled man who was slapped on a bus for not offering his seat to a woman with a baby, which leads to a debate about who is right and who is wrong.

I’m so upset that in our society the woman with a baby should be so impolite. It was wrong of her to get her justice with violence, which really will do great harm to our society.

Today in our society, many other people would take it for granted that they should be offered a seat on the crowded bus, as the morality requires. However, if I were a passenger on the crowded bus, I would stand out to tell her that the young man is also in need of help because of his disability. So it is still a long way for us to build up a harmonious society. In my opinion, we should fight against the violent justice and try every means to stop it from happening so as to solve such kind of problems and safeguard our civilized society.

【解析】

試題分析：本次作文是一個開放性作文，題文要求中含大量的英語信息，這加大了作文的難度�？忌�需首先讀懂題文中的英文信息，然后對這件典型的事件進行約30詞的概括，接著就這件事談一下自己的看法（包括感受、假設(shè)你是當時車上的一員你會如何做、及對于創(chuàng)建和諧社會的建議。）寫作時應(yīng)注意詳略得當，事件要簡述，且談自己的看法時要注意做到有條不紊。

亮點說明：本篇范文，要點準確全面、主次分明、重點突出。文章的時態(tài)使用準確，作者的遣詞造句正確無誤且頗顯語言應(yīng)用的功力。文中有大量的從句使用，例如定語從句“who was slapped on a bus for not offering his seat to a woman with a baby, which leads to a debate about who is right and who is wrong”，賓語從句“I’m so upset that in our society the woman with a baby should be so impolite.”，if虛擬條件句“ if I were a passenger on the crowded bus, I would stand out to tell her that the young man is also in need of help because of his disability.”，這些從句水到渠成得使用使得文章行文緊湊且地道，成為文章極為突出的寫作亮點。