Question

假如你是新華中學(xué)的李明，你的美國朋友Tony來到了中國，給你發(fā)郵件說下周要來你所在的城市天津參觀，你感到非常高興，請根據(jù)以下提示，給他回一封郵件。
1．問清到達(dá)時間，你要去火車站接他。
2．邀請他到你家住宿，給他講一下天津的發(fā)展和風(fēng)俗人情(customs)。
3．建議充當(dāng)向?qū)?guide)，第二天帶他去參觀自己的中學(xué)和南開大學(xué)。
注意：
1．詞數(shù)不少于100；
2．請勿提及真實(shí)學(xué)校姓名；
3．可適當(dāng)加入細(xì)節(jié)，以使內(nèi)容充實(shí)、行文連貫；
4．開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，但不計入總詞數(shù)。
Dear Tony,
I am very-excited to hear that you are coming to our city for a visit, and I can't wait to see you.
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Best wishes to you and look forward to your early reply.
Yours ever.
Li Ming

Answer 1

Dear Tony，
I’m very excited to hear that you are coming to my city for a visit, and I can’t wait to see you.
You say you will arrive by train, and I’m planning to meet you at the railway station. so please write to tell me the number of the train you take and the exact time when you arrive at the station. Besides, I wonder if you’d like to stay in my home while you are in Tianjin so that I can tell you about the development of our city as well as the customs and cultures here. As you are a stranger to our city, it will be my honour to act as your guide. I can show you around my high school and the famous Nankai University on the following day.
Best wishes to you and look forward to your early reply.
Yours ever,
Li Ming

試題分析：本文是書信類作文，你的美國朋友Tony來到了中國，要求寫信給Tony，安排有關(guān)事宜，，文章的要點(diǎn)也基本上都給出來了，而且很具體，考生要把要點(diǎn)解釋清楚，不能有遺漏。在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時在列舉措施的時候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫作時不要啰嗦，力求簡潔。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】所給范文語言簡潔，應(yīng)用了一些較好的詞組和句子：：show sb around帶某人參觀， look forward to盼望， You say you will arrive by train, and I’m planning to meet you at the railway station. so please write to tell me the number of the train you take and the exact time when you arrive at the station.這句話用了兩個定語從句， I wonder if you’d like to stay in my home while you are in Tianjin so that I can tell you about the development of our city as well as the customs and cultures here. 這句話用了賓語從句，目的狀語從句，和as well as，As you are a stranger to our city, it will be my honour to act as your guide. 這句話用了it做形式主語還有文章還使用了Besides,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞，使文章更加連貫。