Question

高中生在成長(zhǎng)的過(guò)程中會(huì)碰到一些煩惱。你班就這一話題正積極籌備召開(kāi)一次主題班會(huì)。請(qǐng)你依據(jù)下表進(jìn)行必要的思考，并用英語(yǔ)準(zhǔn)備一篇發(fā)言稿。

pains	solutions
相貌、體形不美	不必在意
不被他人理解，朋友少	加強(qiáng)溝通
學(xué)習(xí)滯后，壓力大	？
零花錢(qián)不多	？

注意：1、詞數(shù)100左右，開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

2、參考詞匯：相貌：looks 體形：figures 壓力：stress

Good morning, boys and girls,

We high school students do have some growing pains, but we can get rid of them correctly and wisely.

That’s all. Thank you.

Answer 1

One possible version：

Good morning, boys and girls,

We high school students do have some growing pains, but we can get rid of them correctly and wisely.

First, some of us are upset about our figures and looks. It’s unnecessary and it’s not important at all. We needn’t care about it. It is one’s inner beauty that matters. Second, we sometimes seem to be misunderstood by our teachers, parents and classmates. Facing this, we can find proper time to have a heart-to-heart talk with them, trying to remove the misunderstanding. Some of us have fewer friends. I think being open-minded and friendly will do you good. Third, we may fall behind others, which makes us stressed. Actually we can encourage ourselves to work efficiently, full of determination. Last, some of us don’t have much pocket money, so they feel unhappy. Isn’t it strange? So long as we have some, that’s enough.

That’s all. Thank you.

【解析】

試題分析：

根據(jù)提示可知這是材料作文，其格式為發(fā)言稿，所以在寫(xiě)作時(shí)還應(yīng)該注意格式。整個(gè)發(fā)言稿主要可分兩部分，第一部分根據(jù)材料引出話題，第二部分就表格里的問(wèn)題進(jìn)行詳細(xì)的闡述。因?yàn)殚喚頃r(shí)間較為緊張，閱卷老師往往花費(fèi)極少的時(shí)間就瀏覽完文章，所以在第二段的構(gòu)思中一定要注意文章結(jié)構(gòu)銜接緊湊，緊扣題目要求，層次分明。在文章的第一段，作者簡(jiǎn)單直接用一個(gè)強(qiáng)調(diào)句We high school students do have some growing pains, but we can get rid of them correctly and wisely，引出話題又通過(guò)but轉(zhuǎn)折過(guò)度第二段將要講到的問(wèn)題，簡(jiǎn)潔自然。第二段中長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合，以First，Second，Third和Last表明文章層次，其中非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的使用十分靈活，為文章增色不少。最后還用到了疑問(wèn)句，使得文章的句型靈活多變，這一點(diǎn)也是很不錯(cuò)的。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】

這篇范文是典型的發(fā)言稿式作文。其結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，文章的第一段簡(jiǎn)潔明了，第二段分別詳細(xì)闡述問(wèn)題，每個(gè)問(wèn)題用幾句話分層次展開(kāi)，簡(jiǎn)單分析。尤其是第二段過(guò)渡詞如First，Second，Third和Last的使用非常好，相比其他文章有很大的優(yōu)勢(shì)。因?yàn)槔蠋熢陂喚頃r(shí)耗時(shí)較少，在這種情況下，要做的就是盡量使文章層次清晰，過(guò)渡詞明確，減輕閱讀負(fù)擔(dān)。第二段中各種句型靈活變化，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句It is one’s inner beauty that matters；現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語(yǔ)Facing this, we can find proper time to have a heart-to-heart talk with them, trying to remove the misunderstanding；非限制性定語(yǔ)從句we may fall behind others, which makes us stressed；短語(yǔ)do you good等等，這都給文章在細(xì)節(jié)上添分。