Question

Three Umbrellas
Sally was a college student in London. She wanted to buy her mother a nice and useful birthday present, but not too expensive.
One day after a quick and simple lunch, she went shopping. Having looked for half an hour, she came across a shop selling umbrellas at a good price. So she decided to take one.
She thought, “Mom can carry it when she is wearing clothes of any color.” Then she bought a lovely black umbrella and took it to school with her until her class finished.
On her way home in the train that evening she felt hungry, so she went to the buffet car.  She left the black umbrella above her seat. But when she got back, she found it was gone! 
Sally burst into tears. The other passengers felt very sorry for her and asked what was wrong. When she explained the black umbrella she had bought for her mother had disappeared, and that she had to get off at the next station, the three other passengers asked her for her mother’s address so that they could send the umbrella to her in case someone returned it after Sally got off the train.
The next week, Sally got a letter from her mother saying “Thank you very much for your lovely presents, but why did you send me three black umbrellas?”
[寫作內(nèi)容]
1. 以約30個(gè)詞概括短文的要點(diǎn);
2. 然后以約120個(gè)詞寫一篇短文，并包括如下要點(diǎn):
(1) 所讀故事對(duì)你的啟發(fā);
(2) 記敘一個(gè)與該故事中Sally或陌生人的行為相類似的故事;
(3) 你對(duì)親人的感恩或?qū)λ�人善心的感激�?br />[寫作要求]
1. 在作文中可以使用自己親身的經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2. 作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。
3. 標(biāo)題自定。
[評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)]
概括準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫。

Answer 1

Love our mother
Sally, a college student, bought her mother an umbrella as a birthday present but lost it on the train. Moved by her kindness and respect for her mother, some passengers on the train sent her mother three umbrellas.
Sally loved her mother and remembered her mother’s birthday. As a 17-year-old girl, I love my mother very much as well. I send my mother flowers on Mother’s Day. Last year, on mother’s 45^th birthday, I bought my mother a very good comb from store. When I showed it to my mother and told her it was good for her health to comb her hair often, she burst into tears and then smiled to my father and me. Never had I imagined that a simple gift would make her so moved.
Mother’s love is the most precious in the world. I think we can show our love for our mother by doing small things. What is most important is to our love every day.
One possible version:
Love and get loved
Some strangers sent Sally’s mother three umbrellas after they saw Sally in tears because she had lost the umbrella she would send her mother as a birthday present.
From the story of three umbrellas, we can see that people will love you in return if you give love to others. When I was 16 years old, I was in hospital for a small operation. It was difficult for me to reach out my hands for drinks or food. An old lady who was taking care of her husband in the room often came to my bedside to help me. Furthermore, she often told funny stories and made my days there full of joy. She prepared delicious soup for me and her husband. I have been very grateful to her for all that she did. Last year, at her 56^th birthday, I sent her a big birthday cake and spent a good day at her home. Love is a two-way street. Love others, and then you will get loved.

解析試題分析：這篇書面表達(dá)給了一段材料：先要求以約30個(gè)詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容，再以約120個(gè)詞寫一篇短文，內(nèi)容包括：（(1) 所讀故事對(duì)你的啟發(fā); (2) 記敘一個(gè)與該故事中Sally或陌生人的行為相類似的故事; (3) 你對(duì)親人的感恩或?qū)λ�人善心的感激。這道題目要求比較嚴(yán)格，所以在寫作之前一定要看清題目。題目還要求1.作文中可以使用親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。2.作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。寫作時(shí)盡量使用自己不會(huì)的單詞、詞組和句型，同時(shí)也要注意使用一些高級(jí)語(yǔ)法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
考點(diǎn)：根據(jù)原文內(nèi)容寫作
點(diǎn)評(píng)：本文屬于根據(jù)原文內(nèi)容寫作，動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真閱讀原文，并理解內(nèi)容。認(rèn)真看清題目要求，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題。平時(shí)除了加強(qiáng)詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果。