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5．假設(shè)你是學(xué)生李華，得知好朋友William在學(xué)習(xí)中感到壓力很大，學(xué)習(xí)效果甚微，請你按照以下要點給他寫一封電子郵件，幫助他放松身心，提高學(xué)習(xí)效率．
1．快樂學(xué)習(xí)，保持愉快的心情；
2．積極參加體育活動，聽聽歌曲音樂；
3．多與同學(xué)交流，互相鼓勵．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右，開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)為你寫好（不記入總詞數(shù)），但不得抄入答題卡內(nèi)．
2．可適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Dear William，
Recently，I have heard that you feel stressed about study．I have a good mind to offer you some advice on how to study effectively．

Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文要求寫一封電子郵件給自己的好朋友William，給他建議幫助他放松身心，提高學(xué)習(xí)效率，建議涉及三方面：快樂學(xué)習(xí)，保持愉快的心情；積極參加體育活動，如打乒乓球、聽音樂等；多與同學(xué)交流，互相鼓勵．學(xué)寫作時注意以下幾點：1．涵蓋所有內(nèi)容．2、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用現(xiàn)在時，用第一人稱．3、注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】
文章使用了非常好的短語和句子給文章增色，如 現(xiàn)在分詞作結(jié)果狀語 making study an easy job．making us memorize things faster and longer．；not only …but also，把not only放句首用倒裝Not only does exercise build up the body，but also it provides us time to relax and fresh our mind，；which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句…，which will encourage us to overcome difficulties in our study；還有First of all，Last but not least等有效地使語句間連接緊湊．

解答 Dear William，
  Recently，I have heard that you feel stressed about study．I have a good kind to offer you some advice on  how to study effectively．
  First of all，learn in a relaxing way．This will remove our pressure，making study an easy job．（高分句型1）One way to keep up our spirits is to take part in sports．Not only does exercise build up the body，but also it provides us time to relax and fresh our mind．（高分句型2）In this way we can memorize things faster and longer．（高分句型3）Music，too，is another effective means of refreshing and helping us concentrate better．
  Last but not least，we should exchange ideas with our classmates．Through the communication we can find support，which will encourage us to overcome difficulties in our study．（高分句型4）Keep trying，and we will make it．
  I hope all these can benefit you．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                        Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                        Li Hua

點評 提綱類作文在寫作時要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點，寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時需要積累短語和重要句型．