Question

13．A young ensign （海軍少尉） was given the opportunity to prepare his ship to"set sail"．Soon the ship was driven slowly out of the channel．The ensign's efficiency was remarkable．In fact，the talk was that he had set a new record for getting the ship underway．Later he was handed a radio message from the captain．
"My personal congratulations on completing the sail with amazing speed，"it read，"but next time wait until your captain goes aboard before getting underway!"
   What good is a ship without the captain？The ensign did all the right things，but he never did the most important thing!
   It is a matter of priorities （優(yōu)先）．You may accomplish a great deal every day．But are you accomplishing the truly important things？Have you put first things first？
   In work and study，in the areas of mental，physical and spiritual health，are you truly doing the important things？
   Today，will you put first things first？And how about tomorrow？And the next day？If so，you will one day discover that you are building a life that counts．
【寫作內(nèi)容】
以 Put first things first為題，寫一篇讀后感．
1．以約30個(gè)詞概括所讀文章的內(nèi)容；
2．以約120個(gè)詞表達(dá)你對(duì)該主題的見解，并包括如下要點(diǎn)：
 （1）對(duì)該主題發(fā)表你的看法；
 （2）以你自己或他人成長(zhǎng)的經(jīng)歷說(shuō)明你的感受．
【寫作要求】
1．作文中可以使用自己的親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容但不得直接引用原文中的句子
2．文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱．
【評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】概括準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫．

Answer 1

分析 本文是讀寫任務(wù)型寫作，這類作文可按照三段式模板寫：第一段：概況所給短文要點(diǎn)．第二段：過(guò)渡詞引出主題句---闡述理由．第三段：個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)．特別要注意第一段的概括．用自己的語(yǔ)言概括，不能照搬照抄原文． 時(shí)態(tài)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱用第一和第三人稱． 重要短語(yǔ)：be misapprehended by（被誤解），a matter of priorities（優(yōu)先考慮的問(wèn)題），leave sth behind（落下某事），exert great influence on（對(duì)某事產(chǎn)生影響），of one's own accord（自動(dòng)的，自愿的），cease to do （停止做某事），upside down（顛倒的，倒置的），with the cart before the horse（本末倒置），illustrate the significance of（闡述…的重要性），give priority to（優(yōu)先考慮），be familiar with（熟悉某事），deal with（處理，對(duì)付，應(yīng)付），result in（導(dǎo)致），keep sth in mind（把…記在腦子里）．
【高分句型一】
1．①Putting first things first is a matter of priorities，②which was misapprehended by an ensign③who prepared the sailing with remarkable efficiency but left behind the most important thing of having a captain．
①此處是動(dòng)名詞"Putting first things first"作主語(yǔ)，主句為"is"，表語(yǔ)為"a matter of priorities"．
②此處是由關(guān)系代詞"which"引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，主句為"Putting first things first is a matter of priorities"．
③此處是由關(guān)系代詞"who"引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句，先行詞為"an ensign"．
【高分句型二】
2．Whether people put first things first exerts great influence on the process of pushing things forward and even decides the future development．
此處是由連接詞"Whether"引導(dǎo)的主語(yǔ)從句，主句為"Whether people put first things first"，謂語(yǔ)是由"and"連接的"exerts great influence on"和"decides"，賓語(yǔ)為"the process of pushing things forward"和"the future development"．
【高分句型三】
3．In the examination for high school，I should have got tens of more marks if I had given priority to the questions I was familiar with．
此處是由虛擬語(yǔ)氣用在條件狀語(yǔ)從句中，if從句中結(jié)構(gòu)為"had+過(guò)去分詞"，主句結(jié)構(gòu)為"should have done"，是與過(guò)去事實(shí)相反．
【高分句型四】
4．I can not explain①why I was so stubborn at that time and was quite illogical ②when dealing with an important examination，③which directly resulted in many questions unfinished，and of course resulted in my failure to enter a key high school．
①此處是由連接副詞"why"引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，主句為"I can not explain"．
②此處是由"when"引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句，從句中用了省略，結(jié)構(gòu)為"when+現(xiàn)在分詞"，可以理解為"when I delt with an important examination"．
③此處是由關(guān)系代詞"which"引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，主句為"I can not explain why I was so stubborn at that time and was quite illogical when dealing with an important examination"．

解答 Putting first things first is a matter of priorities，which was misapprehended by an ensign who prepared the sailing with remarkable efficiency but left behind the most important thing of having a captain．【高分句型一】（概括）
        Whether people put first things first exerts great influence on the process of pushing things forward and even decides the future development．【高分句型二】Things invariably go of their own accord．If the order is misplaced，the whole process is blocked and ceases to be an abstract concept．Therefore，we can hardly imagine how we achieve future development with things upside down，with the cart before the horse．（看法）
       My experience vividly illustrates the significance of putting first things first．In the examination for high school，I should have got tens of more marks if I had given priority to the questions I was familiar with．【高分句型三】I can not explain why I was so stubborn at that time and was quite illogical when dealing with an important examination，which directly resulted in many questions unfinished，and of course resulted in my failure to enter a key high school．【高分句型四】（以自己成長(zhǎng)的經(jīng)歷說(shuō)明感受）
       I always keep this lesson in mind and promise myself to put first things first this time for the coming NMET examination．（個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 讀寫任務(wù)型寫作是將閱讀與寫作有機(jī)結(jié)合，要求考生既能讀懂文章信息，又要依據(jù)要求規(guī)范連貫地表達(dá)內(nèi)容，其中準(zhǔn)確概括很有挑戰(zhàn)且十分重要，根據(jù)記敘文、議論文、說(shuō)明文等不同文體作相應(yīng)概括，總的來(lái)說(shuō)，遵循以下步驟：確定主題句；尋找關(guān)鍵詞；重構(gòu)主題句；重組支持句．寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時(shí)需注意積累短語(yǔ)和重要句型．