Question

A little boy invited his mother to attend his school’s first teacher-parent meeting. When she said she would go, he was disappointed as he had always been ashamed of his mother’s scar that covered nearly the entire right side of her face. The boy never wanted to talk about why or how she got the scar.

At the meeting, the people were impressed by the kindness and natural beauty of his mother in spite of the scar, but the little boy was still embarrassed and hid himself from everyone. He did, however, overhear a conversation between his mother and his teacher.

The teacher asked carefully, “How did you get the scar on your face?” The mother replied, “When my son was a baby, he was in a room that caught fire. Everyone was too afraid to go in because the fire was out of control, but I went in. As I was running toward his bed, I saw a long piece of wood coming down and I placed myself over him trying to protect him. I was knocked senseless but fortunately, a fireman came in and saved both of us.” She touched the burned side of her face. “This scar will be lasting, but to this day, I have never regretted what I did.” At this point, the little boy came out running toward his mother with tears of regret in his eyes.

【寫作內(nèi)容】

1. 以約30個詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容

2. 以約120個詞講述一個關(guān)于你(或你的朋友)的父母對子女無私的愛的故事。內(nèi)容包括：

（1）講述一個體現(xiàn)父母無私的愛的故事；

（2）父母無私的愛對你（或你的朋友）帶來的影響；

（3）你認(rèn)為作為兒女要如何回報父母的愛。

 

 

 

【寫作要求】

1. 作文中可使用自己的親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2. 文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱。

【評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫。

 

Answer 1

one possible version:

A boy was ashamed of his mother’s scar on the face. Knowing by accident it was caused when she tried to rescue him from a terrible fire at the risk of her life, he was touched and regretful.

Children are said to be a gift from God for parents. Therefore, most parents are grateful for this great gift and never hesitate to sacrifice for their children. My friend, Tom, is disabled from birth, who can only move in a wheelchair. His parents devote all their love to him though most of their friends and relatives try to persuade them to give birth to one more child, which may at least ensure their happy life in their late years. Considerable difficulties are involved in looking after a disabled one, but Tom’s parents make every effort to ensure he can live as happy a life as any normal child. Their devotion and selfless love make Tom an active, confident boy and a top student in school, the most promising one to be admitted to Beijing University.

Tom’s story is but one of the moving stories between parents and children. No one can deny that parents are the ones who love us most and deserve our deepest love. As children, we should always be thankful to their love and be ready to love them in return.

【解析】

試題分析：分析要求可知，內(nèi)容包括：1. 寫故事梗概；2. 講述一個關(guān)于父母對子女無私的愛的故事。內(nèi)容包括：（1）講述一個體現(xiàn)父母無私的愛的故事；（2）父母無私的愛對你（或你的朋友）帶來的影響；（3）你認(rèn)為作為兒女要如何回報父母的愛。短文應(yīng)該用一般過去時講述故事梗概，第三人稱。多使用較高級的詞匯和短語以及固定句式，注意句子之間的連貫性。

【亮點說明】本文概括準(zhǔn)確如開始時對媽媽臉上的傷疤感到ashamed，了解情況后很受感動touched and 也很后悔自己的行為regretful。講述故事體現(xiàn)了父母對一個殘疾孩子無私的愛。他們devote all their love to him，為了全心全意照顧他，不考慮再要一個孩子防老。be involved in looking after a disabled one, make every effort to ensure he can live as happy a life as any normal child. 都很不錯。句子之間的連貫表現(xiàn)在運用了不同的連詞，如but, Therefore。句中還有which \who引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句等提高了文章的表達(dá)水平。

考點：提綱作文。