Question

假如你是李華，在互聯(lián)網(wǎng)上看到美國(guó)高中生Tony希望結(jié)識(shí)一位中國(guó)朋友的信息，請(qǐng)你用英文給他發(fā)一封電子郵件，希望和他做網(wǎng)友，并盼望能盡快收到他的回信。詞數(shù)：120左右。內(nèi)容包括：
1、表示愿意和對(duì)方交朋友；
2、簡(jiǎn)單介紹自己，如性格特征、愛好特長(zhǎng)等;
3、希望多了解美國(guó)文化.
Dear Tony,
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Yours，
Li Hua

Answer 1

One possible version:
Dear Tony,
I am Li Hua, a boy of 16 from China. I know you want to make an e-pal with a Chinese on the Internet. I want to be your friend and wish to know more about the culture of the USA.
I’m a sociable and supportive person who likes talking with people and helping with their problems. I’m good at English and I think we can communicate with each other by sending e-mails or chatting on the Internet. I like table tennis, enjoy singing and I’m crazy about popular music. At the same time, I like travelling around in my spare time. I hope you can come to visit China, and I’ll show you around many places of interest.
I’m looking forward to your early reply.
Yours,
Li Hua

試題分析：本文是一封電子郵件應(yīng)用文，結(jié)交筆友，介紹自己及交友目的。內(nèi)容提示較詳細(xì)，學(xué)生容易把握寫作要求和寫作目的�？忌�在寫作之前要認(rèn)真審題，根據(jù)提示寫作主要有三段內(nèi)容，第一段開門見山表明寫郵件的目的；第二段介紹自己并提出想結(jié)交的目的及打算；第三段結(jié)束，提出自己的希望。另外，要注意文章的時(shí)態(tài)，用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。人稱用第一、二人稱單數(shù)。再有就是不能根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容逐字逐句的翻譯形成漢式的英語(yǔ)，應(yīng)該注意句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文章符合郵件書信的寫作要求，要點(diǎn)齊全，表達(dá)思路明確，知識(shí)點(diǎn)運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)?shù)轿�，文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，比如on the Internet, know more about, places of interest和look forward to 等， 還運(yùn)用了同位語(yǔ)：I am Li Hua, a boy of 16 from China.避免重復(fù)。定語(yǔ)從句：I’m a sociable and supportive person who likes talking with people and helping with their problems. 等。并注意了句子的銜接如：at the same time等。