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16．隨著中國人生活水平的提高，選擇到國外去旅行已成為中國人盛行的度假方式之一．但是，有些中國旅行者的不文明行為卻給廣大的中國人丟盡了臉，如亂丟垃圾、在景區(qū)亂寫亂畫、在公共場所大聲喧嘩、大聲接打手機、在飛機上大打出手等等．請以"Be a Civilized Chinese"為題目，寫一篇英語稿件，投給China Daily．
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Be a Civilized Chinese
With the improvement of Chinese people's living standard，Be a Civilized Chinese
With the improvement of Chinese people's living standard，more and more people choose to travel abroad as a way of spending their holidays．
However，some tourists have uncivilized behavior when they are traveling abroad，which greatly makes all of us Chinese ashamed．For example，when they visit some world famous places of interest，they litter here and there．What's worse，some even carve their names on the trees or statues．Besides，some tourists talk loudly in public places with each other or on their mobile-phones．Worst of all，some passengers on board even fight against each other or with the air-hostesses just because of some inconvenience．These actions show the low quality of some tourists．
As far as I am concerned，it's the duty of every Chinese to protect the environment and public facilities，no matter where we are traveling．（高分句型一） Only in this way can we be civilized Chinese who will win respect from all over the world．（高分句型二）．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一：
As far as I am concerned，it's the duty of every Chinese to protect the environment and public facilities，no matter where we are traveling．就我看來，無論我們身在何處，保護環(huán)境和公共設施是每個中國人的職責．
高分句型二：
Only in this way can we be civilized Chinese who will win respect from all over the world．
只有這樣，文明的中國人才能贏得全世界的尊重．
句型一 ①As far as I am concerned，固定短語使用  ②no matter where we are traveling． no matter where 引導的讓步狀語從句
句型二  ①Only in this way can we be civilized Chinese該句為only位于句首修飾介詞短語，句子用部分倒裝
           ②who will win respect from all over the world 此句為who 作關系代詞引導的定語從句

解答 one possible version                  
                                                        Be a Civilized Chinese
     With the improvement of Chinese people's living standard，more and more people choose to travel abroad as a way of spending their holidays．
     However，some tourists have uncivilized behavior when they are traveling abroad，which greatly makes all of us Chinese ashamed．For example，when they visit some world famous places of interest，they litter here and there．What's worse，some even carve their names on the trees or statues．Besides，some tourists talk loudly in public places with each other or on their mobile-phones．Worst of all，some passengers on board even fight against each other or with the air-hostesses just because of some inconvenience．These actions show the low quality of some tourists．
   As far as I am concerned，it's the duty of every Chinese to protect the environment and public facilities，no matter where we are traveling．（高分句型一） Only in this way can we be civilized Chinese who will win respect from all over the world．（高分句型二）

點評 本書面表達為應用文文體，該類作文往往有特定的表達方式，平時要注意積累符合文體使用特點的話．寫作時力求語言準確、簡潔，句子不宜過長．