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15．假定你是李華，目前在英國某中學(xué)做交換生．學(xué)校公告欄上一則出售二手筆記本電腦的廣告引起了你的興趣．

FOR SALE Lenovo Yoga 300 laptop in excellent condition 4GB RAM and 64GB hard drive Price：£155 Contact Heck at jheck@aef．com

請(qǐng)用英語寫一封電子郵件，咨詢有關(guān)電腦的詳情．內(nèi)容主要包括：
1．表明寫作意圖；
2．詢問相關(guān)信息：是否有原始購機(jī)發(fā)票（invoice），是否維修過，如何付款．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右
           2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，已使行文連貫；
           3．開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，但不計(jì)入總次數(shù)．
Dear Heck，
I am writing for more information about the laptop advertised on the school bulletin board．I would appreciate it if you could be kind enough to answering the following question．（高分句型一）First of all，do you still have the original invoice for the laptop？Secondly，I would like to know whether the laptop has any problems．Have you ever had it repaired？Lastly，where and how can we conclude a deal if both of us agree to one？By the way，would it be possible to give me a 10% discount considering the storage of the laptop is rather small．（高分句型二）
I am looking forward to your reply
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息在英國某中學(xué)做交換生．學(xué)校公告欄上一則出售二手筆記本電腦的廣告引起了你的興趣，用英語寫一封電子郵件，咨詢有關(guān)電腦的詳情寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：表明寫作意圖；詢問相關(guān)信息：是否有原始購機(jī)發(fā)票（invoice），是否維修過，如何付款．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：First of all首先；Secondly其次；Lastly最后；By the way順便說一下；considering考慮到；look forward to盼望
I would appreciate it if you could be kind enough to answering the following question．（高分句型一）
By the way，would it be possible to give me a 10% discount considering the storage of the laptop is rather small．（高分句型二）

解答 Dear Heck，
      I am writing for more information about the laptop advertised on the school bulletin board．I would appreciate it if you could be kind enough to answering the following question．（高分句型一）First of all，do you still have the original invoice for the laptop？Secondly，I would like to know whether the laptop has any problems．Have you ever had it repaired？Lastly，where and how can we conclude a deal if both of us agree to one？By the way，would it be possible to give me a 10% discount considering the storage of the laptop is rather small．（高分句型二）
      I am looking forward to your reply．
                     
Yours，
Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．