Question

自央視推出了家風(fēng)系列訪(fǎng)談，全社會(huì)掀起了談?wù)摷绎L(fēng)、反思家風(fēng)的熱潮。你的筆友Peter收看后寫(xiě)信向你詢(xún)問(wèn)：你的家風(fēng)是什么？假如你是李華，給Peter回信，根據(jù)以下關(guān)鍵詞，從中選取適合你的角度，并結(jié)合個(gè)人經(jīng)歷，曬出你的家風(fēng)。

注意：1． 詞數(shù)：120左右，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮； 2． 開(kāi)頭、結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；

3． 不得透露個(gè)人相關(guān)信息。

Dear Peter,

I am very glad to receive your letter, in which you asked me about family tradition recently referred to on CCTV and meanwhile among the masses． _____________________________________

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What about your ideas about it ? Looking forward to your letter．

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

One possible version：

Dear Peter,

I am very glad to receive your letter, in which you asked me about family tradition recently referred to on CCTV and meanwhile among the masses． Different families hold different focuses of family tradition, such as unity, love and care, honesty, diligence, respect and responsibility．

Now, I’d like to introduce ours to you — hard-working, which my family would appreciate permanently. In the morning, my grandma usually gets up early, prepares us a good breakfast, and then begins to do other jobs. She works slowly, but always makes everything clean. Under the influence of my grandmother, my mother also does quite well both in her work and at home. Because of this attitude, every year she was titled "outstanding communist．" After dinner, she often gives up entertainment, helping our family with housework． It’s my grandmother and my mother's diligent deeds that make me believe that if there is dirt just mop it repeatedly, never quitting until removing it． I serve as a good help to my teachers and classmates as well as my family．Hardworking has deeply rooted in my heart in the form of invisible power．

Family education is an important part of Chinese traditional culture and education． It can be a life of truth; also the principle of doing things． Good family tradition pushes one generation after another to ensure children’s healthy growth, whose positive energy promotes social progress of civilization．

What about your ideas about it? Looking forward to your letter．

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】

 試題分析: 圖表作文要求考生根據(jù)所給的寫(xiě)作要求和提綱，確定文章的中心思想，然后緊緊圍繞中心思想展開(kāi)寫(xiě)作。因此考生首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示，然后確定文章的主題、文體、人稱(chēng)和時(shí)態(tài)。根據(jù)所給提綱，列出要點(diǎn)，并以此為基礎(chǔ)充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運(yùn)用英語(yǔ)知識(shí)，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來(lái)，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)。語(yǔ)言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡(jiǎn)潔。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過(guò)渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性�？忌�必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫(xiě)情況，有無(wú)拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文要求以李華的身份根據(jù)背景提示寫(xiě)出自己的家風(fēng)。內(nèi)容完整，層次清楚。第一段，提出不同的家庭有不同的家風(fēng)such as unity, love and care, honesty, diligence, respect and responsibility．在第二段說(shuō)明自家的家風(fēng)是hard-working，最后提到家風(fēng)的重要性，良好的家庭教育是孩子健康成長(zhǎng)的保障，也是推動(dòng)社會(huì)文明進(jìn)步的正能量。并注意了句子的變化和銜接。同時(shí)文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，比如which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句、but、and連接的并列句、非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞和 as well as。

考點(diǎn):圖表類(lèi)作文。