Question

5．假設(shè)你是高二學(xué)生李華．你和朋友在學(xué)校附近的一家美國(guó)人開(kāi)的西餐廳吃飯，上菜前等了很長(zhǎng)時(shí)間；上菜后發(fā)現(xiàn)味道過(guò)咸；向服務(wù)員要水時(shí)，服務(wù)員態(tài)度不好．所以你決定給餐廳老板寫一封投訴信．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)不少于100字；
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出．
Dear Sir/Madam，
I'm sorry to trouble you，but                                                       
I'm looking forward to your solving the problem．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 這是一封投訴信．根據(jù)題目要求可知用第一人稱，用一般過(guò)去時(shí)表示投訴發(fā)生的內(nèi)容，用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)表示建議和要求．內(nèi)容包括：一點(diǎn)明書(shū)信目的；二敘述事情經(jīng)過(guò)；三提出建議．
高分句型：
1．Though there were not many customers in the restaurant when we were there，we waited for almost an hour before we were served．句子里Though引導(dǎo)讓步狀語(yǔ)從句，表示"盡管"；when是讓步狀語(yǔ)從句里的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句；before we were served是主句的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句．
盡管我們?nèi)ツ抢锏臅r(shí)候客人不多，我們?cè)谏喜饲斑�是等了很長(zhǎng)時(shí)間．
2．However，the waiter we asked just told us in an unfriendly way that it was not his duty to serve us water．句子里 we asked 是the waiter 的定語(yǔ)從句，表示"我們問(wèn)的那個(gè)服務(wù)員"；that it was not his duty to serve us water是 told us 的賓語(yǔ)從句．
可是，我們向服務(wù)員要水時(shí)，那個(gè)服務(wù)員態(tài)度不好，說(shuō)那不是他的職責(zé)．

解答 Dear Sir/Madam，
I'm sorry to trouble you，but I'd like to make a complaint．（點(diǎn)明書(shū)信目的）
Today I had lunch with my friends in your restaurant and I felt quite unhappy．Though there were not many customers in the restaurant when we were there，we waited for almost an hour before we were served．【高分句型一】When we finally got our lunch，we found that the food was so salty that we had to ask for some water．However，the waiter we asked just told us in an unfriendly way that it was not his duty to serve us water．【高分句型二】（敘述事情經(jīng)過(guò)）
In my opinion，you are expect ed to offer not just food，but also good customer service．Anyway，everyone likes to enjoy their food in a pleasant atmosphere．I believe more people will go to your restaurant if you can improve your service．（提出建議）
I'm looking forward to your solving the problem．
Yours，
Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 考查開(kāi)放類作文．
審題時(shí)寫作的第一步，審查書(shū)面表達(dá)題干中隱含的讀者對(duì)象和撰寫人，即搞清楚此篇文章是"由誰(shuí)寫給誰(shuí)"的．寫稿人是誰(shuí)一般都已明確指出，給出形式假設(shè)環(huán)境中的"某人"，如"假設(shè)你是李華"，寫作時(shí)即用第一人稱"我"，即李華．而讀者對(duì)象有時(shí)沒(méi)有明示，要考生自己去進(jìn)行判斷．