Question

【題目】閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

At first, Michael Surrell didn't see the black smoke or flames shooting from the windows of his neighbors' home. He and his wife had just parked around the corner from their own house in Allentown, Pennsylvania, when they got a call from one of his daughters: “The house next door is on fire! ” He went to investigate. That's when he saw a woman crying desperately on their porch.

“The baby' s in there! ” the woman cried. Though the fire department had been called, Surrell, then 64, instinctively ran inside. “The baby” was 8-year-old Tiara Roberts, the woman's granddaughter.

Entering the burning house was like “running into a bucket of black paint,” Surrell says. The thick smoke caused him to stumble blindly around, burned his eyes, and made it impossible to breathe. The conditions would have been dangerous to anyone, but for Surrell, who has chronic obstructive pulmonary disease （慢性阻塞性肺病）, they were life-threatening.

After a few minutes in the smoke-filled house, he retreated outside to catch his breath. Surrell knew he couldn't hold his breath for long. Taking a deep breath, he went in a second time. The darkness was overwhelming. Yet because the house had a similar layout （布局）to his, he found the stairs and made it to the second floor. He turned to the right and was met by intense heat. He was already out of breath.

His throat and lungs burned as if he'd breathed in fire instead of the smoke and soot in the air. Every blink stung his eyes. All he could hear was the crackling and popping of burning wood. Then a soft but distinct moan （呻吟聲） emerged. Still unable to see, Surrell fell to his knees on the hot wood floor. He crawled toward the sound, feeling around for any sign of the girl.

注意：

1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150詞左右；

2.至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；

3.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好；

4.續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。

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Finally, he touched something — a shoe, then an ankle.

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Surrell woke up in the hospital a couple of days later.

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Answer 1

【答案】Paragraph1:

Finally, he touched something-a shoe, then an ankle. He pulled Tiara toward him. Her body was weak and she wasn't breathing. He hugged her into his arms and stood. He felt the heat of the flames on his cheeks. Turning, he fought through the smoke and ran blindly into the blackness. Surrell put Tiara down on the porch. He started CPR-the first time he' d ever done so. Soon she opened her eyes and took a breath on her own. Surrel's throat closed off.

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Surrell woke up in the hospital a couple of days later. He suffered severe burns to his windpipe and the upper portion of his lungs. He spent over a week in the hospital. The fire worsened Surrell' s pulmonary condition, and he feels the effects even two years later. As a result, he takes extra medication that helps open his airways. “It' s a small price to pay,” he says. “I' d do it again in a heartbeat. Wouldn't give it a second thought.”

【解析】

這是一篇記敘文。文章講述了Michael Surrell家附近的一所房子著火了，鄰居家的孫女被困火場(chǎng)，Michael Surrel雖然有慢性阻塞性肺病，但他還是義無(wú)反顧地沖進(jìn)火場(chǎng)救出了鄰居的孫女，自己也受傷了。文章續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段提到“Finally, he touched something — a shoe, then an ankle.”最終他摸到了一些東西——先是一只鞋，接著是腳踝。根據(jù)文章最后一段最后一句提到“He crawled toward the sound, feeling around for any sign of the girl.”他一直在尋找著女孩的蹤跡，由此可以判斷續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段應(yīng)繼續(xù)描寫(xiě)Michael Surrel找到女孩所做出的努力，以及找到女孩后的狀態(tài)等。續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段則提到“Surrell woke up in the hospital a couple of days later.” Surrell是在醫(yī)院中醒來(lái)的，說(shuō)明Surrell受了非常嚴(yán)重的傷。第二段則可以描寫(xiě)Surrell救人后的心理活動(dòng)等。

根據(jù)關(guān)鍵字判斷情節(jié)發(fā)展。第一段介紹了故事發(fā)生的背景，“The house next door is on fire!”女兒打電話來(lái)說(shuō)鄰居家著火了�！�He went to investigate.” Surrell到家后立刻去查看情況，此處就間接說(shuō)明了他是一個(gè)熱心的人。另外，第三段最后一句提到“but for Surrell, who has chronic obstructive pulmonary disease （慢性阻塞性肺�。�, they were life-threatening.” Surrell是有慢性阻塞性肺病，對(duì)于健康人來(lái)講，進(jìn)火場(chǎng)救人都非常的危險(xiǎn)，但Surrell還是義無(wú)反顧地去救人了，由此更能體現(xiàn)他的優(yōu)秀品質(zhì)，因此在續(xù)寫(xiě)中也需要體現(xiàn)。““running into a bucket of black paint,””提到失火的房子就像是一桶濃厚的黑色顏料，說(shuō)明當(dāng)時(shí)火勢(shì)的兇猛，由此可以在續(xù)寫(xiě)中間接提到Surrell 救人時(shí)巨大的難度。“he went in a second time.”說(shuō)明Surrell救人時(shí)難度非常大，但也說(shuō)明了他憑著自己的毅力完成的救人的動(dòng)作，由此也可以體現(xiàn)他熱心助人的優(yōu)秀品質(zhì)。因此，在續(xù)寫(xiě)中也要對(duì)主人公品質(zhì)的描寫(xiě)進(jìn)行主題升華。