Question

一家知名外資企業(yè)準(zhǔn)備與當(dāng)?shù)卣�府合作修建一所�?guó)際學(xué)校為了、建辦﹑好學(xué)校，該企業(yè)總裁Mr. White廣泛征求學(xué)生意見，并公開了他的郵地址。請(qǐng)你以周杉的名義給他寫一封E-mail，談?wù)勀愕慕ㄗh及理由。
內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)：
1．學(xué)習(xí)環(huán)境 （如：教室，操場(chǎng)……）
2. 特色課程（如：網(wǎng)球，鋼琴……）
3. ……
要求：
1. 詞數(shù)100左右
2. 文中不能出現(xiàn)自己的姓名和學(xué)校的名稱。
Dear Mr. White,
I am glad to hear you will build an international school, and I’d like to give you some advice. ___________________________________________________________________________________________
                                                                                            
    
I hope I can enter the school. 
Sincerely yours,
Zhou Shan

Answer 1

Dear Mr. White,
I am glad to hear you will build an international school, and I’d like to give you some advice. I think the new school should be nice and pleasant. Students need bright classrooms to study in, modern libraries to broaden their horizons, large playgrounds to play different kinds of sports on. The school may provide students with some special courses, such as art, tennis or piano lessons. These courses can make students relaxed and encourage them to develop freely. It would be better for students to have some chances to practice in your company so that they can get some useful experience.
I hope I can enter the school. 
Sincerely yours,
Zhou Shan

解析試題分析：考察半開放性作文。本文的話題是建設(shè)國(guó)際學(xué)校的具體理由，所給的中文提示教少，給考生發(fā)揮的余地教大。本文要注意書信的格式，同時(shí)要求考生有很強(qiáng)的謀篇布局的能力和組織要點(diǎn)的能力。在完成開放性作文時(shí)，首先要選擇自己熟悉的短語(yǔ)或者句型，在你的能力范圍之內(nèi)，選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化，因?yàn)檫@樣你才可以更好的駕馭。同時(shí)也要選擇合適的連接詞，把各個(gè)要點(diǎn)組織成一個(gè)完整的整體，如besides, further, last but not least等。在發(fā)表個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)的時(shí)候，可以使用諺語(yǔ)來提升整個(gè)文章的檔次和文采，也能增加得高分的可能性。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文中有一些高級(jí)的詞匯，如provide sb with sth提供某人某物。Broaden one’s horizons開闊眼界等。文章的結(jié)構(gòu)較為合理，也很流暢。但是連接詞使用的較少，可以適當(dāng)添加。
考點(diǎn)：考察半開放性作文