Question

【題目】One day, Zeng’s wife decided to go out for shopping, but her little son insisted on going with her to the market. Thinking that she would come back very soon, and that the naughty boy would bring her a lot of trouble, she was unwilling to do so.

In order to persuade the boy to stay home, she told him, “Oh, come on, good boy, if you listen to Mom and then Mom will give you a present when I am back.”

“What present are you going to give me, Mom?” asked the son.

“We haven’t eaten meat for a long time, so I will kill our pig and let you enjoy a big nice dinner.” The mother comforted the boy when it happened that their pig was wandering in front of the house. Just at that time, her husband came back and heard what she said. Thinking of the nice meal, the boy gave in.

Not very soon, the mother came back, but what she saw shocked her. It was her husband who had killed the only pig of the poor family.

“Why did you kill it? You know that it is very important for my family.” she scolded him.

“I did that just for your promise!” Mr. Zeng answered.

[寫作內(nèi)容]

以約30個(gè)詞概括這則中國(guó)寓言故事“曾子”的品質(zhì)；

以約120個(gè)詞，從“曾子”或者“曾子之妻”的行為任選一個(gè)角度發(fā)表你的看法，

并包括如下要點(diǎn):

(1) 你認(rèn)為“曾子”或者“曾子之妻”的不同的做法對(duì)孩子的教育會(huì)導(dǎo)致的結(jié)果是什么樣的，并說(shuō)出理由；

(2) 敘述你一次誠(chéng)實(shí)守信的經(jīng)歷，并談?wù)勀愕母惺堋?/span>

[寫作要求]

1．可以使用實(shí)例來(lái)支持你的論點(diǎn)，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容論述，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2．標(biāo)題自定。

Answer 1

【答案】

Stick to what you promise

As described in the passage, Mr Zeng firmly kept his wife’s promise to his child, from which we learn that Mr. Zeng is worth depending on and good at educating children.

I can’t agree more with Mr. Zeng’s education method. Had I been his child, I would have formed a deep impression on it and gradually cultivated this quality. Just as an old saying goes, “Action speak louder than words.” If our parents themselves can do what they promise, we are likely to follow them.

The passage so well retained me the remembrance of an experience. Once, I made a promise to myself that I wouldn’t play basketball that week. Nevertheless, it is so fascinating that I even tried to persuade myself to enjoy it. In time, I resisted the temptation and kept my promise. Since then, I have realized that it is keeping our promise that makes us feel a sense of fulfillment and wins respect from others. So, please stick to your promise.

【解析】

試題分析：本文是提綱類作文。根據(jù)要求在第一部分用約30詞的概括，要注意人﹑事﹑理的概括呈現(xiàn)，寫作時(shí)不能摘抄文中的句子，必須要進(jìn)行概括且能夠使用較為高級(jí)的句型句式；在第二部分約120詞的寫作中一方面需要對(duì)“曾子”或者“曾子之妻”的不同的做法對(duì)孩子的教育會(huì)導(dǎo)致什么樣的結(jié)果做出評(píng)價(jià)并說(shuō)出理由，另一方面要能敘述一次誠(chéng)實(shí)守信的經(jīng)歷并談?wù)劯惺埽?/span>寫作時(shí)要把所要求的點(diǎn)寫全，語(yǔ)句通順，同時(shí)要注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)、上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。根據(jù)句意適當(dāng)使用并列連詞，同時(shí)也要合理運(yùn)用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句子為文章增色添彩。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文屬于讀寫任務(wù)型寫作，采用三段式，內(nèi)容齊全，布局合理，使用高級(jí)句子。第一段中的“…from which we learn that Mr. Zeng is worth depending on and good at educating children”使用非限制性定語(yǔ)從句；“Had I been his child, I would have formed a deep impression on it and gradually cultivated this quality”運(yùn)用了虛擬語(yǔ)氣與倒裝省略的結(jié)合句式；并且能夠運(yùn)用“just as an old saying goes, “Action speak louder than words.””的諺語(yǔ)為文章增色添彩，使用恰到好處。Nevertheless等連接詞的運(yùn)用也使得行文更為流暢。