Question

【題目】假如你是一名高中生李華，由于幾年來霧霾天氣越來越嚴(yán)重，嚴(yán)重地影響了人們的健康和生活，你用英語寫了一篇文章向?qū)W校報刊投稿，寫作內(nèi)容如下

1、說明霧霾情況及危害。

2、提出應(yīng)對措施。

注意：1. 上下文連貫，行文流暢。

2. 詞數(shù)100左右 (開頭結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，并不計入詞數(shù))。霧霾天氣the hazy weather

Dear editor

Recently, the haze weather has become a daily one right here in large part of China,______________________________________________________________________________________

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Best regards

Yours，

LiHua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear editor

Recently, the haze weather has become a daily one right here in large part of China,which has done great harm to our daily life.Traffic accidents and the delay of flights frequentlyhappened because of the haze weather.More and more people have to go to see the doctor because the serious disease caused by the haze. A great number of people have to stay at home to avoid the haze,even affecting students'normal classes.

In my opinion, strictmeaures on environmental protection should be taken.We should call on people to form the habit of using green product and saving energy as much as possible.What’s more, We have to do more to raise people’s awareness of environmental protection . Only in this way can we expect to have more sunny days. Best regards

Yours ,

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：考查提綱式作文：假如你是一名高中生李華，由于幾年來霧霾天氣越來越嚴(yán)重，嚴(yán)重地影響了人們的健康和生活，你用英語寫了一篇文章向?qū)W校報刊投稿，寫作內(nèi)容如下1、說明霧霾情況及危害。2、提出應(yīng)對措施�？忌�首先要認真閱讀前面的提示，采用不同的表達方式將各要點完整地表述出來，語言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡潔。同時應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性。

【亮點說明】范文用了一些常見的短語：do great harm to“對…造成傷害”，還有一些語法知識和句型：…，which has done great harm to our daily life，這句話運用了非限制性定語從句；... because the serious disease caused by the haze. 這句話用done做定語和原因狀語從句，....,even affecting students'normal classes.

這句話用了doing做結(jié)果狀語。文中用了in my opinion,What’s worse 等連接詞，這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。