Question

最近，你們班召開了以“我的‘中國夢’”為主題的班會活動。請寫一篇日記，記述班會情況及自己的感受。內(nèi)容要點如下：
1. 每位同學(xué)都暢談了自己對中國夢的理解； 
2. 你談到了自己的夢想；  
3. 如何實現(xiàn)自己的夢想。
　注意：
1. 總詞數(shù)120左右；  
2. 不可逐條翻譯；  
3.開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。
Recently we had a class meeting on the topic of My “China Dream”.                                    
                                                                                              
                                                                                              
                                                                                              
                                                                                               
                                                                                              

Answer 1

Recently we had a class meeting on the topic of My “China Dream”. Inspired by President Xi’s China Dream, everyone talked enthusiastically about his understanding of China Dream. We all believe that this dream will come true in the future.
I also talked about my own dream. I have always wanted to be a doctor. Not only can doctors save people’s lives but also they are doing a respectable job. Doctors can also help people to live a better life with their professional knowledge.
To realize my dream, I must try to work hard from now on. I must learn as much as I can so that I can get into a good medical college, where I can prepare myself adequately for the job of a doctor. Only in this way can I accomplish my goal.

解析試題分析：本文是提綱類作文，話題是大家熟悉的中國夢，學(xué)生們有話可說，而且文章的要點也基本上都給出來了，但只是一個提綱，考生還需要做適當(dāng)?shù)陌l(fā)揮。在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，如強調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時在列舉措施的時候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫作時不要啰嗦，力求簡潔的表達自己的觀點。
【亮點說明】所給范文語言簡潔，不拖拉，使用短語：come true 成為現(xiàn)實，live a better life過著更好的生活，還有范文充分體現(xiàn)高中教材中的重點語法和句式：Inspired by President Xi’s China Dream, everyone talked enthusiastically about his understanding of China Dream.這句話用了過去分詞做狀語， Not only can doctors save people’s lives but also they are doing a respectable job.這句話用了倒裝句， To realize my dream, I must try to work hard from now on. 這句話用了不定式做目的狀語，I must learn as much as I can so that I can get into a good medical college, where I can prepare myself adequately for the job of a doctor. 這句話用了結(jié)果狀語從句和定語從句，Only in this way can I accomplish my goal.這句話也是倒裝句。
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