Question

現(xiàn)在許多年輕人對友誼的認識存在一些誤區(qū)。有些人認為能與你經(jīng)常呆在一起的人便是朋友，有些人認為能經(jīng)常一起吃吃喝喝的人是朋友，另一些人則認為能幫你隱瞞錯誤、逃避責(zé)任的人是朋友。你怎么看待這些觀點？請根據(jù)以下提示，用英語寫一篇短文，談?wù)勀銓ε笥训目捶ā?/p>

朋友應(yīng)該：1.誠實可信； 2. 樂于助人； 3. 相互尊重； 4. 志趣相投； 5.具有愛心

注意：1. 詞數(shù)：150左右；

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3. 開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

Nowadays many young people have some misunderstanding about friendship.

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Answer 1

One possible version：

Nowadays many young people have some misunderstanding about friendship.Some say they will make friends with those who can often stay with them. Some think if a person can eat out with them, he or she is a friend. Others argue that someone who can help them escape punishment when they make a mistake is a friend.

Personally , I don’t agree with the above opinions. What makes a really good friend then?

First , your friend must be honest. They must always tell you the truth, even when the truth might not be what you want to hear. Second , a friend should be helpful and always willing to lend a hand . Favors should be done with gladness. Next , true friends respect each other. A friend should treat you the way they want to be treated. Also, sharing some interests is pretty important when it comes to friendship . Last but not least , a friend should be kind and should love you for who you are.

【解析】

試題分析：根據(jù)提示判斷本文屬于話題作文。命題者在提示語中對“朋友和友誼”這一概念進行不同觀點的闡述，希望學(xué)生在作文中表達自己的觀點。當(dāng)然為了正確引導(dǎo)學(xué)生，命題者在提示語中給出了幾點對“friend and friendship”的要求，學(xué)生在寫作文的時候可以適當(dāng)參考。根據(jù)出題者的第二點要求“可以適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫”，學(xué)生在描述關(guān)于朋友的看法時可以添加生活實例以豐富文章主體部分，并以使文章內(nèi)容更充實。注意不要使用過于簡單的詞匯或短語或過多的口語，適當(dāng)使用一些高級詞匯和短語，會使文章提升檔次。無論是在文章的開頭還是結(jié)束部分，都要明確表明自己的觀點。

【亮點說明】

本篇范文的行文構(gòu)建非常明確，層次清晰，邏輯性強，極大地方便了閱卷老師的閱卷過程。在文章的第一段，作者首先描述了不同的人對于朋友的看法，在這個過程中作者使用了不同的詞來表達同一個意思，如Some say，Some think，Others argue that 等，這既避免了重復(fù)，又表明了作者的寫作功底。緊接著，作者用一句話表明了自己的觀點Personally , I don’t agree with the above opinions. 到這里，閱卷老師還沒有看出作者的觀點，于是下文What makes a really good friend then? 伴隨著這個疑問句，閱卷老師有了繼續(xù)閱讀的興趣。在文章的第三段，作者用了First , your friend must be honest；Second , a friend should be helpful and always willing to lend a hand ；Next , true friends respect each other以及Last but not least , a friend should be kind and should love you for who you are很好地展現(xiàn)了文章的層次感，很大程度上博得了閱卷老師的好感。