Question

【題目】假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三（1）班的學(xué)生李華。下面四幅圖描述了你們帶領(lǐng)留學(xué)生Jack看中醫(yī)(TCM) 的經(jīng)歷。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)圖片的先后順序，為�？�“英語(yǔ)角”寫(xiě)一篇短文，介紹你們帶Jack看醫(yī)生前后的全過(guò)程。

注意：詞數(shù)不少于60。

提示詞：把脈 feel one’s pulse

Answer 1

【答案】One possible version:

Last month, we took Jack, an American exchange student who fell ill to a traditional Chinese doctor, which turned out to be an eye-widening experience for him.

It was in a math class that I noticed Jack coughing with a runny nose. Everyone looked at him with concern. Seeing this, one classmate and I offered to take him to the TCM department. He hesitated but followed. At the clinic, the doctor first looked at Jack for a while before feeling his pulse and checking his tongue. The doctor then asked if the cough had been on and off for a long time. In great surprise, Jack nodded his head. The doctor then wrote a prescription with instructions on how to take the medicine.

After boiling the herb medicine at home, I brought it to him in his dormitory. The first taste almost made him throw up. It was really too hard even for me. I comforted him with an old saying “Good medicine to the health tastes bitter to the mouth”. Jack managed to swallow the medicine with a frown. But after a week, when he recovered, he felt amazed at the effect of the Chinese medicine. At a class meeting about the deepest impressions about China, Jack chose “TCM in My Eyes” as the topic. He shared his experience of TCM, from doubt at first to belief in the end.

We all felt inspired and proud hearing a foreigner introducing the profound TCM. I have every reason to believe that with more and more international communication, TCM will be accepted globally and benefit more people in the future.

【解析】試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文。題目中給出的材料為幾幅圖片，故動(dòng)筆前先要認(rèn)真觀(guān)察圖片，了解圖片所蘊(yùn)含的信息。寫(xiě)作中應(yīng)先簡(jiǎn)單描述一下圖片內(nèi)容，及中醫(yī)特點(diǎn)的特點(diǎn)把脈，熬中藥。然后列出簡(jiǎn)單提綱，確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)，句式，關(guān)鍵單詞等問(wèn)題。注意不要遺漏要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。結(jié)合材料可知本文主要是第一人稱(chēng)，時(shí)態(tài)一般應(yīng)該用一般過(guò)去時(shí)。適當(dāng)使用連詞，序數(shù)詞，注意從句的應(yīng)用，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。這篇文章對(duì)于考生的綜合能力要求較高，要求考生有很強(qiáng)的謀篇布局的能力和組織要點(diǎn)的能力。需要注意緊扣文章主題，給出的要點(diǎn)都需要包括，缺一不可。寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，一定要契合給出的開(kāi)頭，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問(wèn)題。盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)要點(diǎn)全面，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，是一篇較好的范文。這篇短文使用了大量的短語(yǔ)，為文章增色不少，如: manage to do設(shè)法完成某事，in the future在將來(lái)。還使用了定語(yǔ)從句Last month, we took Jack, an American exchange student who fell ill to a traditional Chinese doctor, which turned out to be an eye-widening experience for him.和強(qiáng)調(diào)句It was in a math class that I noticed Jack coughing with a runny nose.等多種句式結(jié)構(gòu)，增加了文章的可讀性。