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假定你是李華，在一個英文網(wǎng)絡(luò)論壇上， 你看到一個名叫Grown-up的中學(xué)生發(fā)帖（post）尋求幫助，請根據(jù)帖子的內(nèi)容、寫作要點(diǎn)和要求回帖。

Grown-up        Post at 20-9-2013  21:18                             1#
newable ☆	Hi, everyone,   I’m a Senior Grade Three student, and I am suffering from mental pressure these days, what should I do?                                          TOP
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寫作要點(diǎn)：1．告訴Grown-up心理壓力不可避免；

2．告訴Grown-up心里壓力的危害；

3．建議Grown-up應(yīng)正確面對心理壓力；

4．介紹你面對心里壓力時所采取的措施。（至少寫兩點(diǎn)措施）

注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右。   2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

3．文章的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

Hi, Grown-up,

It’s a fact that we face more and more mental pressure in our life.

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Hope my ideas will work.

 

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【答案】

 

Hi, Grown-up,

It’s a fact that we face more and more mental pressure in our life. In my opinion, everyone will meet some mental pressure in their life, so don’t worry. But if it lasts a long time, it may do harm to our body.

Whenever I meet pressure, I try to keep calm and think how to overcome it. Sometimes it is very effective. When I’m stressed out, I listen to music or do some sports. After that, I often find that my moods become much better. If I can’t overcome it by myself, I will turn to my parents, teachers or good friends.

To sum up, we should face pressure bravely and overcome it actively.

Hope my ideas will work.

【解析】

試題分析：考察提綱類作文。本文的話題是如何正確面對心理壓力，告訴對方心理壓力是很正常的現(xiàn)象。對人的身心健康也有很大的影響，一定要引起重視，而且要積極地面對它。在采取措施方面要注意勞逸結(jié)合，多和家人朋友交流，緩解各種不適情況。寫作時需要使用平時積累的層次關(guān)系的短語，多使用被動，倒裝、虛擬來提升作文的美度。在平時寫作時應(yīng)該多進(jìn)行閱讀，對閱讀過程中寫的好的表達(dá)要進(jìn)行積累，并且學(xué)以致用，勤積累，多背誦，這樣才能作文才能穩(wěn)步的提升。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】：在范文中運(yùn)用了較多的連接詞，如To sum up等；也有高級的句式：whenever I meet pressure。這個讓步狀語從句。高級詞匯如overcome, do harm to…等等�？忌�在以后的寫作過程中也要注意文章的潤色。

考點(diǎn)：考察提綱作文