Question

【題目】假定你是李華，得知你的外國(guó)筆友Peter跟你談?wù)?/span>“中國(guó)夢(mèng)” 個(gè)話題。她來信問你的夢(mèng)想，請(qǐng)用英語給她寫封回信。主要內(nèi)容包括：

1.對(duì)夢(mèng)想的理解；

2.你的人生夢(mèng)想；

3.如何實(shí)現(xiàn)你的夢(mèng)想。

注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；

2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Dear Peter,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Peter,

I am writing to share with you my dream. Our homeland dreams to restore the former glory, which inspires me to recall my dream—to become a doctor, saving lives and shouldering the burden of low-expense medical treatment for distant poor villagers.

Being a motivation and goal, dreams make us determined, diligent and devoted as well as making life more meaningful. However, it is often the case that we are faced with a lot of difficulties on the way to success. Therefore, giving full play to strengths and minimizing weaknesses in current preparation for the college entrance exam is my first challenge to face consciously. Also, I am fully convinced that sparing no efforts to study will contribute a lot.

I am curious about yours and reply to me soon.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】首先審題，用英語寫封回信，談?wù)撝袊?guó)夢(mèng)。任務(wù)中給出的提示信息包含如下內(nèi)容：1.對(duì)夢(mèng)想的理解；2.你的人生夢(mèng)想；3.如何實(shí)現(xiàn)你的夢(mèng)想。抓住了這亮點(diǎn)，我們就抓住了文章的核心內(nèi)容。注意寫信的格式和用語。其次選用正確的人稱和時(shí)態(tài)，考慮用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，第一人稱來寫。然后寫出單個(gè)句子，使用正確的連詞，連句成段。具體來說，寫這篇文章時(shí)，要注意：1、提示中的內(nèi)容比較泛泛，需要適當(dāng)補(bǔ)充；2、為使文章層次清楚，可分三個(gè)自然段寫：第一自然段說明自己對(duì)“中國(guó)夢(mèng)”的理解；第二自然段具體說明自己的夢(mèng)想是什么；第三自然段說明實(shí)現(xiàn)自己夢(mèng)想的具體規(guī)劃。這篇文章對(duì)于考生的綜合能力要求較高，要求考生有很強(qiáng)的謀篇布局的能力和組織要點(diǎn)的能力。需要注意緊扣文章主題，給出的要點(diǎn)都需要包括，缺一不可。寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問題。盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】本篇書面表達(dá)要點(diǎn)全面，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，是一篇較好的范文。這篇短文使用了大量的短語，為文章增色不少，如: share with分享，be faced with面對(duì)。還使用了定語從句Our homeland dreams to restore the former glory, which inspires me to recall my dream和賓語從句Also, I am fully convinced that sparing no efforts to study will contribute a lot.等多種句式結(jié)構(gòu)，增加了文章的可讀性。