Question

下列圖畫(huà)描述的是你在十月十五日(星期五)放學(xué)路上發(fā)生的事情，請(qǐng)據(jù)此寫(xiě)一篇日記，記敘事情發(fā)生的經(jīng)過(guò)。
注意：
1．短文包括圖畫(huà)所表現(xiàn)的主要內(nèi)容，可以適當(dāng)增減細(xì)節(jié)，使文章連貫、完整；
2．詞數(shù)120左右。(不含給出部分)

October 15   Friday  Fine
This afternoon when I was on my way home from school, I found a building on fire. ___________________________________________________________________________
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Answer 1

October 15   Friday  Fine
This afternoon when I was on my way home from school, I found a building on fire. I rushed to a nearby telephone box and called the firefighters.
Several minutes later, the firefighters arrived and tried their best to control the fire. With the help of the firefighters, a lot of people left the building safely. At that time a foreign woman came in a hurry to tell the firefighters something. But they couldn't understand what she said. I went to the woman and asked her what was happening. She told me that her daughter was still in the building. I told the firefighters about it at once. They immediately ran into the building. Two minutes later, they rushed out with the little girl.
The woman was very thankful to me and the firefighters for the help.

試題分析：本文是一則日記，格式已經(jīng)寫(xiě)好。描述圖片是不能面面俱到，一定要講重點(diǎn)，甚至一句話就能概括一幅圖。主要描述自己是如何幫助外國(guó)人翻譯的，以及消防隊(duì)員是如何做的。最后可以增加外國(guó)婦女對(duì)自己和消防隊(duì)員的感謝。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：日記一般要寫(xiě)日期和天氣，寫(xiě)在日記第一行的右上角，不過(guò)本篇已經(jīng)給出。如果是命題日記，要把標(biāo)題寫(xiě)在日記的第二行。將正文空兩格寫(xiě)在第三行，一般日記都是直接切入正題。日記一般都是第一人稱(chēng)，時(shí)態(tài)用過(guò)去式，現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。
寫(xiě)作常見(jiàn)步驟推薦：1. 審題：體裁，時(shí)態(tài)，人稱(chēng)。
2. 列要點(diǎn)，找準(zhǔn)動(dòng)詞或動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)。
3. 擴(kuò)展句子。
4. 加關(guān)聯(lián)詞。
5. 核查錯(cuò)誤：有無(wú)冠詞錯(cuò)誤，拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤，主謂一致錯(cuò)誤等低級(jí)錯(cuò)誤。
特別提醒：加強(qiáng)訓(xùn)練書(shū)寫(xiě)，整潔美觀的卷面對(duì)作文的得分起著至關(guān)重要的作用。