Question

假設(shè)你叫張林。你的英國(guó)朋友Andrew下個(gè)月要來你校學(xué)習(xí)兩個(gè)月。他請(qǐng)你對(duì)他上學(xué)期間的交通方式提出建議。

現(xiàn)在，請(qǐng)你用英語(yǔ)回一封信，按以下各點(diǎn)答復(fù)。

1．建議騎自行車上學(xué)；

2．自行車是學(xué)生常用交通工具；

3．騎自行車的一些好處；

4．騎自行車注意的問題。

注意：

1．詞數(shù)100左右，信的開頭和結(jié)束語(yǔ)已為你寫好（不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）。

2．可根據(jù)內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使行文連貫。

Dear Andrew,

Very happy to hear from you and you’re welcome to study in our school for the next two months.

 

Answer 1

One possible version:

Dear Andrew,

Very happy to hear from you and you’re welcome to study in our school for the next two months. As to the question about the transportation to and from school , I’d like to recommend your riding a bicycle . Here are some reasons .

Firstly , riding a bicycle to and from school is very common among students , for buying or repairing a bicycle doesn’t cost a lot. Next , parking a bicycle is easy and convenient in our school no matter how busy the traffic could be. Actually , bicycle riding is also a practical to do exercise and protect the environment .What you should do carefully is just to keep an appropriate speed while riding and lock it after you are off it .In this way ,you will feel it simple and relaxing to ride a bicycle while you are here .

Hopefully , what I have mentioned above could be helpful and wish you a happy stay in our school .

Yours sincerely ,

Zhanglin

【解析】

試題分析：本文是一封書信應(yīng)用文，向英國(guó)朋友來校學(xué)習(xí)的交通方式提出建議。要求提示較詳細(xì)，考生容易把握寫作要求和寫作目的�？忌�在寫作之前要認(rèn)真審題，根據(jù)提示寫作主要有三段內(nèi)容，第一段已經(jīng)給出提示，開門見山表明自己的態(tài)度及建議——騎自行車上學(xué)；第二段具體描述騎自行車的好處及注意問題；第三段結(jié)束，提出自己的希望，表達(dá)自己的祝福。另外，要注意文章的時(shí)態(tài)，用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和將來時(shí)。人稱用第二人稱。再有就是不能根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容逐字逐句的翻譯形成漢式的英語(yǔ)，應(yīng)該注意句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】文章符合書信的寫作要求，要點(diǎn)齊全，表達(dá)思路明確，知識(shí)點(diǎn)運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)?shù)轿�，文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，比如hear from，as to，recommend，no matter how busy，protect the environment并用動(dòng)名詞做主語(yǔ)，buying or repairing a bicycle doesn’t cost a lot；parking a bicycle is easy and convenient in our school ；還運(yùn)用了主語(yǔ)從句：What you should do carefully is just to…; what I have mentioned above could be helpful… 注意了句子的銜接如：Here are some reasons. Firstly，Next , Actually, In this way, Hopefully等。這些詞句用得恰當(dāng)?shù)轿�，為文章增添色彩�?/p>

考點(diǎn)：應(yīng)用文——書信