Question

13．據(jù)最新一項(xiàng)調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)，"低頭族"正以星火燎原之勢(shì)蔓延．假定你是李華，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)提示，用英語(yǔ)給《二十一世紀(jì)報(bào)》編輯部寫一封讀者來信，以引起社會(huì)各界對(duì)此的廣泛關(guān)注．
1．描述這一現(xiàn)象；
2．分析其原因及弊端；
3．你認(rèn)為該如何改變現(xiàn)狀．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．但可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不記入總詞數(shù)．
參考詞匯：低頭族phubbing
Dear editor，
I'm writing to you about a common phenomenon to draw it to the public attention．
                ．
Best wishes to you!
Yours truly，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，寫一篇短文，陳述對(duì)自己的成長(zhǎng)起著很大影響的家庭、學(xué)校、社會(huì)、朋友、書籍、名人等諸多因素中的兩個(gè)或三個(gè)及理由．
寫作時(shí)人稱以第一和第三人稱為主，時(shí)態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主．
寫作要點(diǎn)：1．選擇并陳述對(duì)你的成長(zhǎng)起著很大影響的家庭、學(xué)校、社會(huì)、朋友、書籍、名人等諸多因素中的兩個(gè)或三個(gè)； 2．談?wù)勀愕目捶ê屠碛桑?br />重要短語(yǔ)：write to sb（寫信給某人），a common phenomenon（一個(gè)常見的現(xiàn)象），draw sth to the public attention （引起某人的關(guān)注），wait for （等候），be addicted to（上癮），ignore sb （忽略某人），be used for（被用于），keep in touch with sb（與某人保持聯(lián)系），be engaged in（忙于），fail to do（沒能做某事），communicate with（與…交流），help sb
 with sth （幫助某人某物），care about sth（關(guān)心某事）．
【高分句型一】
1．①As is often the case，②when people are having meals，③waiting for buses or even walking along streets，they are always addicted to their phones，heads hanging down，completely ignoring others．
①此處是關(guān)系代詞"as"引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，關(guān)系代詞"that"在從句中作主語(yǔ)，意為"正如"，主句為"they are always addicted to their phones，heads hanging down，completely ignoring others"．
②此處是時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句．
③此處是由現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)作伴隨狀語(yǔ)．
【高分句型二】
2．The reason for the increasing number of phubbings everywhere is that smart phones nowadays can be used for people to do nearly everything，such as playing mobile games，shopping online and keeping in touch with friends through QQ．
此處是由連接詞"that"引導(dǎo)的表語(yǔ)從句，結(jié)構(gòu)為"The reason for sth is that+從句"，意為"某事的原因是…"．
【高分句型三】
3．Moreover，people engaged in phones fail to communicate well with those around them．
此處是由"過去分詞短語(yǔ)"作名詞"people"的后置定語(yǔ)，可以理解為"people who are engaged in phones fail to communicate well with those around them"，句子的謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞為"fail to communicate well with"，賓語(yǔ)為"those around them"．

解答 Dear editor，
     I'm writing to you about a common phenomenon to draw it to the public attention．（目的）
 As is often the case，when people are having meals，waiting for buses or even walking along streets，they are always addicted to their phones，heads hanging down，completely ignoring others．【高分句型一】（描述現(xiàn)象）
The reason for the increasing number of phubbings everywhere is that smart phones nowadays can be used for people to do nearly everything，such as playing mobile games，shopping online and keeping in touch with friends through QQ．【高分句型二】However，too much exposure to phones is harmful for their health and safety．Moreover，people engaged in phones fail to communicate well with those around them．【高分句型三】（分析其原因及弊端）
Personally，people should wisely use their phones to help with their work and study．Meanwhile they'd better care more about their family and friends rather than phones．（如何改變現(xiàn)狀）
Best wishes to you!
Yours truly，
Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 提綱作文在寫作時(shí)要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點(diǎn)．寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時(shí)需注意積累短語(yǔ)和重要句型．