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2．最近我國多地出現(xiàn)霧霾（haze）天氣，人們甚至必須戴口罩外出．公眾對當(dāng)前環(huán)境狀況表示高度擔(dān)憂．請你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)給校報(bào)寫一篇稿件，要點(diǎn)如下：
（1）人們對霧霾的關(guān)注；
（2）分析霧霾形成的原因；（如：工業(yè)污染，交通污染等）
（3）提出治理霧霾的建議．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；3．開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Recently，the air quality in China has raised widespread concern．The Air Quality Index in most parts reached 500．Everything around disappeared from our sight．Some highways were closed．（高分句型一） More traffic jams and accidents happened．People had to wear masks．What's worse，many people found it difficult to breathe．
The heavy hazy weather in China has been caused by many factors．First，the severely polluted environment contributed a lot to this nightmare．Second，the increase of cars in the city area plays an important role．The cars send off a lot of poisonous gases．
In my opinion，We should call on people to use more public transport，thus reducing the number of cars in the streets．（高分句型二） Besides，some factories which cause pollution should be closed down．What's more，We have to do more to raise people's awareness of environmental protection．Only in this way can we expect to have more sunny days．（高分句型三）．

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分析 本題主要是圍繞霧霾向英語報(bào)社投稿，屬于典型的議論文模式，即影響+原因+建議，可參考固定的寫作模板，建議采用三段論結(jié)構(gòu)．范文采用經(jīng)典的三段論結(jié)構(gòu)，第一段闡述影響，第二段闡述原因，第三段提出建議．第三段第一句We should call on people to use more public transport，thus reducing the number of cars in the streets．thus在此處作副詞，后句是一個(gè)動(dòng)詞ing形式作結(jié)果狀語；第三段第二句some factories which cause pollution should be closed down使用了which引導(dǎo)的定語從句；最后一句Only in this way can we expect to have more sunny days使用了only引導(dǎo)的倒裝句．本文使用了許多短語：What's worse更糟的是，contribute to導(dǎo)致，play an important role起重要作用，send off散發(fā)，call on號(hào)召，What's more還有．本文在詞語使用也頗具特色，如第二段使用了First …second…首先…其次…，最后一段使用了副詞Besides此外，使得文章流暢自然．總結(jié)：在陳述原因時(shí)，可套用格式First …second…last but not least…或Firstly…secondly…

解答 Recently，the air quality in China has raised widespread concern．The Air Quality Index in most parts reached 500．Everything around disappeared from our sight．Some highways were closed．（高分句型一） More traffic jams and accidents happened．People had to wear masks．What's worse，many people found it difficult to breathe．
     The heavy hazy weather in China has been caused by many factors．First，the severely polluted environment contributed a lot to this nightmare．Second，the increase of cars in the city area plays an important role．The cars send off a lot of poisonous gases．
     In my opinion，We should call on people to use more public transport，thus reducing the number of cars in the streets．（高分句型二） Besides，some factories which cause pollution should be closed down．What's more，We have to do more to raise people's awareness of environmental protection．Only in this way can we expect to have more sunny days．（高分句型三）

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