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20．This is a picture of a ballet dancer whose left foot looks shockingly different from the right one．Some even jokes that the left foot represents how elegant ballet dancers look．On the contrary，the right one reveals the nature of those dancers'life．One can hardly imagine how much time and effort have been devoted to endless practice．

寫作內(nèi)容
請(qǐng)根據(jù)你對(duì)所示圖片及文字的理解，寫一篇150詞左右的文章，要點(diǎn)如下：
1．以約30個(gè)詞簡(jiǎn)要描述圖片的內(nèi)容；
2．以約120個(gè)詞談?wù)勀愕目捶�，�?nèi)容包括：
（1）圖片給你的啟示，并舉例說明；
（2）你最想對(duì)圖片的芭蕾舞者說什么？為什么？
寫作要求
1．可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文的句子；
2．作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的姓名和學(xué)校的名稱
3．不必寫標(biāo)題
評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)
內(nèi)容完整，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)．
The dancer's left foot is elegantly wrapped in her ballet shoe tied to the ankle with a silk ribbon．The shoeless right foot，however，looks horribly different．Bruises and scars occupy every inch of her toes．
I can only imagine the untold hardship the dancer must have endured for the endless hours of practice to look so glamorous on the stage．Likewise，behind every seemingly stunning success，there can be failures，disappointments，and embarrassments．When the whole world is crazy for JK Rowling's Harry Potter stories，rarely do people know it was after the books had been turned down 12 times by the publisher that they finally came out．Nothing is difficult to a willing heart．However，when we admire others'success，we should remember it is not from nowhere．
I have imagined the dancer to be my friend．I will，instead of telling her how awesome her dancing is，ask her to take good care of herself，for health is the real elegance of life．．

Answer 1

分析 本文是讀寫任務(wù)型寫作，這類作文可按照三段式模板寫：
第一段：概況所給短文要點(diǎn)．
第二段：過渡詞引出主題句---闡述理由．
第三段：個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)．特別要注意第一段的概括．用自己的語言概括，不能照搬照抄原文．時(shí)態(tài)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱用第一人稱和第三人稱．重要短語：be wrapped in（被包裹起來），be tied to （束縛于），endure the untold hardship （毫無怨言地忍受苦難），look glamorous（看起來迷人），be crazy for （對(duì)…瘋狂），turn down（拒絕），came out （出版），be awesome（太棒了）．【高分句型】

1．The dancer's left foot is elegantly wrapped inher ballet shoe tied to the ankle with a silk ribbon．這里是過去分詞短語tied作her ballet shoe 的后置定語，被修飾的名詞her ballet shoe與動(dòng)詞tie存在邏輯上的被動(dòng)關(guān)系．意為"用絲帶系在腳踝上的芭蕾舞鞋"．

2．I can only imagine the untold hardship thedancer must have endured for the endless hours of practice to look so glamorouson the stage．這里是定語從句，先行詞是the untold hardship，定語從句為"the dancer must have endured for the endless hours of practice"，從句中endure后缺少賓語，省略了關(guān)系代詞that/which，不定式to look so glamorous on the stage作目的狀語．

3．When the whole world is crazy for JK Rowling's Harry Potter stories，rarely do people know it was after the books had been turned down 12 times by the publisher that they finally came out．Nothing is difficult to a willing heart．
①這里是否定詞rarely置于句首，后用部分倒裝．句型為"否定詞+一般疑問句"．②動(dòng)詞know后的賓語從句中為強(qiáng)調(diào)句型"it was after the books had been turned down 12 times by the publisher that they finally came out"．強(qiáng)調(diào)句型的結(jié)構(gòu)為"It is/was+強(qiáng)調(diào)部分+that…"，本句中強(qiáng)調(diào)介詞短語"after the books had been turned down 12 times by the publisher"．

解答 The dancer's left foot is elegantly wrapped in herballet shoe tied to the ankle with a silk ribbon．【高分句型】The shoeless right foot，however，looks horribly different．Bruises and scars occupy every inch of her toes．（描述圖片）
I can only imagine the untold hardship the dancer must have endured forthe endless hours of practice to look so glamorous on the stage．【高分句型】Likewise，behind every seemingly stunning success，there can be failures，disappointments，and embarrassments．When the whole world iscrazy for JK Rowling's Harry Potter stories，rarely do people know it was after the books had been turneddown 12 times by the publisher that they finally came out．【高分句型】Nothing is difficult to a willing heart．However，when we admire others'success，we should remember it is not from nowhere．（啟示及舉例說明）
I have imagined the dancer to be my friend．I will，instead of telling her how awesome her dancing is，ask her to take good care ofherself，for health is the real elegance of life．（對(duì)圖片的芭蕾舞者想說的話及原因）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 讀寫任務(wù)型寫作是將閱讀與寫作有機(jī)結(jié)合，要求考生既能讀懂文章信息，又要依據(jù)要求規(guī)范連貫地表達(dá)內(nèi)容，其中準(zhǔn)確概括很有挑戰(zhàn)且十分重要，根據(jù)記敘文、議論文、說明文等不同文體作相應(yīng)概括，總的來說，遵循以下步驟：確定主題句；尋找關(guān)鍵詞；重構(gòu)主題句；重組支持句．寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時(shí)需注意積累短語和重要句型．