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5．假定你是學校志愿者團隊的學生李華，為維護城市自然環(huán)境，五月六日你們班到中山公園參加了環(huán)保志愿者活動．請你用日記的形式記敘此事．
內容包括：1．活動內容：撿拾垃圾，分發(fā)傳單…
2．你對本次活動的感想．
注意：1．詞數100左右；
2．日記的開頭已為你擬好，不計入總詞數．
提示詞：傳單leaflets
May 6th Saturday Fine．
Today we took part in a meaningful activity organized by the Voluntary Service Club of our school in order to protect the natural environment of the city．（高分句型一）In the morning，we went to Zhongshan Park by bus，talking and laughing all the way．Upon our arrival，we began to work in no time．Some were picking up rubbish while others were collecting the cigarette ends and bottles to throw them into the dustbins．（高分句型二）After getting the work done，some of us distributed leaflets to raise the public's awareness of the damage littering can cause．
We have learned much from the voluntary experience，which offers us an opportunity to contribute to society better．（高分句型三）With the joint efforts，our city will become a more enjoyable place in the near future．．

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分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據提示信息假定你是學校志愿者團隊的學生李華，為維護城市自然環(huán)境，五月六日你們班到中山公園參加了環(huán)保志愿者活動．請你用日記的形式記敘此事，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：活動內容：撿拾垃圾，分發(fā)傳單…；你對本次活動的感想．
 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據要表達的內容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應該用一般過去時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：take part in參加；in order to以便，為了；in no time立即，馬上；pick up撿；contribute to 貢獻；
Today we took part in a meaningful activity organized by the Voluntary Service Club of our school in order to protect the natural environment of the city．（高分句型一）
Some were picking up rubbish while others were collecting the cigarette ends and bottles to throw them into the dustbins．（高分句型二）
We have learned much from the voluntary experience，which offers us an opportunity to contribute to society better．（高分句型三）

解答 May 6th Saturday                                                         Fine
      Today we took part in a meaningful activity organized by the Voluntary Service Club of our school in order to protect the natural environment of the city．（高分句型一）In the morning，we went to Zhongshan Park by bus，talking and laughing all the way．Upon our arrival，we began to work in no time．Some were picking up rubbish while others were collecting the cigarette ends and bottles to throw them into the dustbins．（高分句型二）After getting the work done，some of us distributed leaflets to raise the public's awareness of the damage littering can cause．
     We have learned much from the voluntary experience，which offers us an opportunity to contribute to society better．（高分句型三）With the joint efforts，our city will become a more enjoyable place in the near future．

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．