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11．假如你是李津．你的美國朋友Tom即將參加一個漢語演講大賽，他為此感到十分緊張．因此，他用電子郵件向你咨詢如何克服賽前的緊張情緒．請你根據以下要點給他寫一封回信．1．表示理解并安慰；2．給出建議并說明理由；3．表達祝愿．
注意：1．詞數(shù)不少于100字．2．可適當增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫；3．信的開頭和結尾已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)．
DearTom，
You wrote to ask for advice on how to get rid of your nervousness right before the Chinese speech contest．What you should remember is that most of people will feel nervous just like you．（高分句型一）Therefore，take it easy．I'd like to give you the following advice．
To begin with，you should prepare and understand the subject of your speech completely．The more familiar you are with the subject，the less nervous you feel．（高分句型二）Besides，another valid suggestion is to regardnervousnessas a good thing，which may give you the motivation to deliver your speech in an emotive way．（高分句型三）Last but not least，as the old saying goes，the confidence is the first secret of success．So believe in yourself and you will succeed．
I hope you will find these suggestions of great value．May you succeed in the competition．
Yours sincerely，
Li Jin．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據提示信息假如你是李津．你的美國朋友Tom即將參加一個漢語演講大賽，他為此感到十分緊張．因此，他用電子郵件向你咨詢如何克服賽前的緊張情緒．請你根據以下要點給他寫一封回信，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點包括：表示理解并安慰；給出建議并說明理由；表達祝愿． 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據要表達的內容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：get rid of去除，擺脫；Therefore因此；To begin with首先；Besides另外；Last but not least最后同樣最重要；believe in相信；
What you should remember is that most of people will feel nervous just like you．（高分句型一）
The more familiar you are with the subject，the less nervous you feel．（高分句型二）
Besides，another valid suggestion is to regard nervousness as a good thing，which may give you the motivation to deliver your speech in an emotive way．（高分句型三）

解答 DearTom，
       You wrote to ask for advice on how to get rid of your nervousness right before the Chinese speech contest．What you should remember is that most of people will feel nervous just like you．（高分句型一）Therefore，take it easy．I'd like to give you the following advice．
       To begin with，you should prepare and understand the subject of your speech completely．The more familiar you are with the subject，the less nervous you feel．（高分句型二）Besides，another valid suggestion is to regard nervousness as a good thing，which may give you the motivation to deliver your speech in an emotive way．（高分句型三）Last but not least，as the old saying goes，the confidence is the first secret of success．So believe in yourself and you will succeed．
        I hope you will find these suggestions of great value．May you succeed in the competition．
                                                                                                                                                                                      Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                Li Jin

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．