Question

閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。
Scientists find that hard-working people live longer than average men and women. Career women are healthier than housewives. Evidence shows that the jobless are in poorer health than the job-holders. A study shows that whenever the employment rate increases by 1%, the death rate decreases correspondingly(相應(yīng)地) by 2%. All this comes down to one point: work is helpful to health.
Why is work good for health? It is because work keeps people busy, away from loneliness. Researches show that people feel unhappy, worried and lonely when they have nothing to do. Instead, the happiest are those who are busy. Work serves as a bridge between man and reality. By work, people come into contact with each other. By collective activities, they find friendship and warmth. This is helpful to health. The loss of work means the loss of everything. It affects man spiritually and makes him likely to disease.
Besides, work gives one a sense of fulfillment and a sense of achievement. Work makes one feel his value and status in society. When a writer finishes his writing or a teacher sees his students grow, they are happy beyond words.
[寫作內(nèi)容]
1.以約30個(gè)詞概括短文的要點(diǎn)；
2.然后以約120個(gè)詞就“努力學(xué)習(xí)，快樂生活”的主題發(fā)表看法，并包括如下要點(diǎn)：
(1)你贊同“努力學(xué)習(xí)也可以快樂生活”這一觀點(diǎn)嗎？簡要闡述理由。
(2)舉例說明你的同學(xué)是如何努力學(xué)習(xí)并保持健康樂觀的心態(tài)的？
(3)簡述如何才能做到努力學(xué)習(xí)并快樂生活？
[寫作要求]
1. 在作文中可以使用自己親身的經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2. 作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。
[評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)]  概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫。

Answer 1

Study hard and enjoy yourselves
The author highlights the effect of work on people’s health, because it can rid one of loneliness, and make one feel fruitful and proud of himself, which always contributes to a good body.
In common with the author, I agree that the harder you work, the happier you will be, as hard work can keep a person busy, and give one a sense of achievement, hence he will be self-confident and feel happy.
Around me, some of my classmates work very hard, hoping to fulfill their dream. However, they don’t seem unhappy. Oppositely, they try to find fun even under the pressure of the NMET. For example, they may share the joy with others when working out a problem. Sometimes they may play a trick on his partner using the newly-learned idioms, thus refresh themselves quickly.
As for me, I think only when we truly experience what fun it is, can we spare no effort to study hard and meanwhile enjoy ourselves.

試題分析：本文屬于讀寫任務(wù)寫作，動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真閱讀原文，并理解內(nèi)容。認(rèn)真看清題目要求，這篇書面表達(dá)給了一段材料：先要求以約30個(gè)詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容，要求有很高的概括提煉的能力，要抓住文章的主題，再以約120個(gè)詞寫一篇短文，按照要點(diǎn)去表達(dá)，不能有遺漏，寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。寫作時(shí)盡量使用自己會(huì)的單詞、詞組和句型，同時(shí)也要注意使用一些高級(jí)語法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】The author highlights the effect of work on people’s health, because it can rid one of loneliness, and make one feel fruitful and proud of himself, which always contributes to a good body.這句話有原因狀語從句和非限制性定語從句， In common with the author, I agree that the harder you work, the happier you will be, as hard work can keep a person busy, and give one a sense of achievement, hence he will be self-confident and feel happy.這句話有賓語從句，原因狀語從句，還有hence這樣的高級(jí)詞匯，和in common with、這樣的詞組。Around me, some of my classmates work very hard, hoping to fulfill their dream. 這句話是現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語， they may share the joy with others when working out a problem. 這句話用的是狀語從句的省略，Sometimes they may play a trick on his partner using the newly-learned idioms, thus refresh themselves quickly.這句話也是現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語,As for me, I think only when we truly experience what fun it is, can we spare no effort to study hard and meanwhile enjoy ourselves.這句話用的是倒裝句。