Question

11．假定你是李華．你的筆友Jane最近因?yàn)閷W(xué)業(yè)繁重，身體感到不適，嚴(yán)重影響了學(xué)習(xí)．因此，她發(fā)e-mail給你，尋求你的幫助．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)提示予以回復(fù)．
寫作要點(diǎn)：合理的飲食；2．適度的鍛煉；3．充足的睡眠．4…
注意：
1．短文詞數(shù)不少于100；
2．開頭和結(jié)尾部分已寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
3．可根據(jù)情況增減細(xì)節(jié)，詳略得當(dāng)；
Dear Jane，
I'm sorry to hear that you are feeling ill these days．In your letter you asked me how to stay healthy and keep attentive in class．Here is my advice．
Dear Jane，
I'm sorry to hear that you are feeling ill these days．In your letter you asked me how to stay healthy and keep attentive in class．Here is my advice．
First，have three meals a day and never neglect your breakfast．Keep a balanced diet．For example，eat nutritious food like fresh vegetables，fruits，eggs and fish．Second，taking morning exercise every day is a nice choice．As we all know，everyday exercise helps build a strong body．You can do some sports，such as running，walking，or playing ball games to refresh yourself if weather permits．But，remember not to exercise outdoors in a smoggy day．Finally，don't stay up too late to make sure you have a good sleep every night．
If you do accordingly，I believe you'll feel well soon and you can listen to your teacher energetically and attentively．
Best wishes．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua
Best wishes．
Yours sincerely
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型：
句型一：
Second，taking morning exercise every day is a nice choice．每天早上晨練時(shí)一個(gè)非常好的選擇．
句型二：
As we all know，everyday exercise helps build a strong body 眾所周知，每天鍛煉可以塑造一個(gè)強(qiáng)健的體魄．
句型一使用taking morning exercise這一動(dòng)名詞短語充當(dāng)主語，非謂語的正確使用會(huì)使得文章更有亮點(diǎn)．
句型二使用As we all know，這一非限制性定語從句，從句的使用讓文章層次感更強(qiáng)，表達(dá)更為準(zhǔn)確．

解答 Dear Jane，
I'm sorry to hear that you are feeling ill these days．In your letter you asked me how to stay healthy and keep attentive in class．Here is my advice．
       First，have three meals a day and never neglect your breakfast．Keep a balanced diet．For example，eat nutritious food like fresh vegetables，fruits，eggs and fish．Second，taking morning exercise every day is a nice choice．（高分句型一）As we all know，everyday exercise helps build a strong body．（高分句型二）You can do some sports，such as running，walking，or playing ball games to refresh yourself if weather permits．But，remember not to exercise outdoors in a smoggy day．Finally，don't stay up too late to make sure you have a good sleep every night．（提出建議）
     If you do accordingly，I believe you'll feel well soon and you can listen to your teacher energetically and attentively．（給予美好期盼）
     Best wishes．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 提綱類書面表達(dá)要求要點(diǎn)明確，規(guī)定了考生的表述的思路，該類書面表達(dá)在高考中所占比例較大．因此，考生在行文時(shí)，必須抓住要點(diǎn)，做到思維清晰靈活，運(yùn)用適當(dāng)?shù)恼Z言將要點(diǎn)完好銜接，切忌過度發(fā)散思維．