Question

7．人人都在渴望幸福，人人都在感受幸福．請用英語寫一篇120詞左右的短文，描述你體驗幸福的一次經(jīng)歷，并談一談你對幸福的理解．
                                                                                    
                                                                                     

Answer 1

分析 本文為議論文寫作．人稱以第三人稱為主，時態(tài)為一般現(xiàn)在時．寫作要點為：一次幸福的體驗以及對幸福的理解．
重點短語：shelter…from（遮擋…使免受）；be about to do（即將，正要做某事）；without any hestitation（毫不猶豫）；
                  spring up（出現(xiàn)，涌現(xiàn)）；as long as（只要）；be willing to do（愿意做某事）．
高分句型：1．Without an umbrella to shelter me from the heavy rain，I had to stand still and wait for my father．
                  這里介詞短語Without an umbrella to shelter me from the heavy rain用在句子中作狀語．
                  2．I was about to rush home when I found that my English teacher，Miss Wang is also waiting for the rain to stop．
                  句子里的時間副詞when相當于at that time．
                  3．Seeing Miss Wang walking in the rain with my umbrella，I smiled and a sense of happiness sprung up in my heart．
                  主語i與動詞see存在邏輯主謂關系，這里現(xiàn)在分詞短語Seeing Miss Wang walking in the rain with my umbrella在句中作狀語．
                  4．As a famous saying goes，happiness is only real when shared．
                  恰當運用諺語，提升文章的感染力．

解答 I still remember the night when it was a cold，late afternoon and it was showering． Without an umbrella to shelter me from the heavy rain，I had to stand still and wait for my father．（高分句型一）． After seemly long hours'waiting，my father finally arrived．I was about to rush home when I found that my English teacher，Miss Wang is also waiting for the rain to stop．（高分句型二）．．Without any hestitation，I went to her and gave my umbrella to her．She was surprised and very happy．Seeing Miss Wang walking in the rain with my umbrella，I smiled and a sense of happiness sprung up in my heart..（高分句型三）．
As a famous saying goes，happiness is only real when shared..（高分句型四）． As long as we are willing to share，we'll find happiness everywhere．（個人看法）

點評 做開放類話題書面表達時，首先要審好題，明確一個觀點．寫作時要注意包含寫作要點切不可漏寫．在寫作寫好后要從單詞拼寫，單復數(shù)，時態(tài)等角度去逐一審查，整個寫作過程中一定要注意書寫的認真及規(guī)范．平時需要注意積累短語和重要句型，可以根據(jù)話題來對短語進行歸類，給人提供建議的議論文文體等等，這樣在考試的時候才能有備無患，在規(guī)定時間內(nèi)寫出較好的文章．