Question

每到放學(xué)，家長接學(xué)生的車輛總會導(dǎo)致校門口的交通過度擁擠，學(xué)校對此非�？鄲馈＜偃缒闶歉叨�年級的學(xué)生李華，請給校長寫一封信，分析一下該現(xiàn)象產(chǎn)生的原因，并提出你的建議。
注意：120詞左右；開頭已給出，不計(jì)入詞數(shù)。
Mr. Wang,
I’m writing to you to share my opinions about the problem of heavy traffic every day after school at our school gate.
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Best wishes!
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Mr. Wang,
I'm writing to you to share my opinions about the problem of heavy traffic every day after school at our school gate.
With the development of economy, more and more families begin to have cars of their own, which contributes partly to the problem. Besides, some parents always try to park their cars as close as possible to the school gate, without taking anything else into consideration.
In order to solve it, I firmly hold the view that some effective measures must be taken. First, I think it necessary to call on all the students to go back home by bus or by bike. Second, if they have to be picked up by their parents by car, they'd better remind their parents to park their cars in proper places. Finally, it might be helpful to make students of different grades leave school at different times.
I hope my suggestions will be useful to help solve the problem.
Best wishes!            
Yours sincerely,                              
Li Hua

試題分析：本文是書信類作文，要求給校長寫一封信，分析一下校園擁堵產(chǎn)生的原因，并提出你的建議。題目沒有具體說明要點(diǎn)內(nèi)容，考生就這兩方面展開說就可以，在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時(shí)在列舉措施的時(shí)候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫作時(shí)不要啰嗦，力求簡潔。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】所給范文語言簡潔，應(yīng)用了一些較好的詞組和句子：contributes to導(dǎo)致，taking sth. into consideration.將…考慮在內(nèi)，call on sb to do號召某人做…pick up 撿起，remind sb to do提醒某人做…，With the development of economy, more and more families begin to have cars of their own, which contributes partly to the problem. 這句話用了定語從句， In order to solve it, I firmly hold the view that some effective measures must be taken.這句話用了同位語從句， I think it necessary to call on all the students to go back home by bus or by bike. 這句話用了it做形式賓語， it might be helpful to make students of different grades leave school at different times.這句話用了it做形式主語。還有范文還使用了Besides, First, Second, Finally,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞，使文章更加通順。