Question

【題目】你的朋友王林剛轉(zhuǎn)學(xué)去了一所新學(xué)校，學(xué)校的各個(gè)學(xué)生社團(tuán)(associations)正在納新。面對眾多的選擇，王林沒了主意，寫信向你求助。假如你是李越，你認(rèn)為可以考慮參加籃球協(xié)會(huì)(the Basketball Association)或者英語俱樂部(the English Club)。請你用英語給王林寫一封100—120詞的信，推薦這兩個(gè)社團(tuán)，并分別說明推薦理由。

注意：信的抬頭與落款已給出（不計(jì)入詞數(shù)）。

Dear Wang Lin,

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Yours sincerely

Li Yue

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Wang Lin,

In your letter, you have asked me for my advice on how to choose a proper association in your new school. Thanks for trusting me and I’ll try to make some suggestions.

I feel that it would be wise if you could join in the Basketball Association since you love it so much. Not only can it satisfy your interest and give you relaxation from heavy school work, it can also promote your friendship with your new companions. Besides, the English Club is also a wonderful choice. Apart from improving your English study, their activities are helpful in many aspects. For instance, your skills of communication will turn out to be better than before. By the way, maybe it is a good chance to make friends with English native speakers.

I hope you will find these suggestions helpful. If you have any more problems, please contact me at any time. I’m willing to discuss with you whenever you need.

Yours sincerely,

Li Yue

【解析】

試題分析：該作文要求寫一封信，屬于應(yīng)用文的范疇。其中信件的基本格式已經(jīng)給出。文章主題注意條理要清晰，邏輯順序和結(jié)構(gòu)要恰當(dāng)，同時(shí)要盡量保持簡潔精干的內(nèi)容，不拖泥帶水。要注意題中所給的信息，不可偏題，應(yīng)用文寫作對于文章內(nèi)容的要求是要達(dá)到寫作目的。盡量保持卷面整潔，字體美觀，注意行文的連貫性。時(shí)態(tài)：一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。使用一些高級句型和詞匯提升作文檔次。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】 正文第一段寫明回信的主題，以及寒暄。第一句使用了賓語從句you have asked me for my advice on how to choose a proper association in your new school你想我征求在你新學(xué)校選擇社團(tuán)的意見。正文第二段第一句用了多個(gè)從句嵌套。I feel that it would be wise if you could join in the Basketball Association since you love it so much. 我感覺如果你加入籃球部應(yīng)該是明智的，因?yàn)槟愫芟矚g籃球。第一個(gè)that引導(dǎo)了賓語從句做feel的賓語，if引導(dǎo)的的條件狀語從句，since又引導(dǎo)了一個(gè)原因狀語從句。第二句使用了not only …but also結(jié)構(gòu)，句子要倒裝。這里開始陳述去籃球部的原因：Not only can it satisfy your interest and give you relaxation from heavy school work, it can also promote your friendship with your new companions. 它不僅能滿足你的興趣愛好、讓你從繁重的學(xué)業(yè)中放松，它也能促進(jìn)你與你的新伙伴之間的友誼。第三句開始介紹英語社團(tuán)使用了連詞beside表示轉(zhuǎn)折。第四句開始說明英語社團(tuán)的好處 Apart from improving your English study…除了能提高你的英語成績…第四句開始具體展開英語社團(tuán)的好處。正文第三段結(jié)尾表達(dá)祝福，使用了一個(gè)if引導(dǎo)的狀語從句。If you hav any more problems, please contact me at any time. 如果還有什么問題，隨時(shí)聯(lián)系我。Whenever引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語從句I’m willing to discuss with you whenever you need。無論何時(shí)你需要的時(shí)候我都很樂意與你討論。本文用了大量的從句以及各種復(fù)雜句，還使用了不少好的結(jié)構(gòu)和詞組，如thank you for doing something謝謝你做某事、not only… but also不僅…而且、Apart from除了、 For instance例如, turn out to be結(jié)果是、By the way順便說等。文章結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，沒有廢話。是一篇優(yōu)良之作。