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11．假定你是李華，最近你的美國網(wǎng)友James來信和你討論"網(wǎng)絡(luò)不文明用語"的話題．請你就此給他寫封回信，內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)如下：
1．網(wǎng)絡(luò)不文明用語對社會造成負(fù)面影響；不利于青少年身心發(fā)展．
2．給出可行的建議：自覺避免使用；號召周圍同學(xué)朋友不使用；向有關(guān)部門尋求幫助．
注意：1．詞數(shù)：100左右；
2．信的開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
3．開頭語已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)．
提示詞：不文明的 uncivilized．
Dear James，
How are you going？I miss you very much．I'm writing to you to talk about the uncivilized words used on Internet．
With the development of economy，more and more people become addicted to the Internet and like chatting online．（高分句型一）As a result，lots of uncivilized words come into being，which can do harm to our society．On one hand，they are bad for Internet civilization．On the other hand，they influence teenagers'physical and mental health，which will have a bad effect on their development．（高分句型二）
As far as I'm concerned，it's urgent to do something to stop their use．Firstly，as high school students，it's our duty to avoid getting involved in the use of uncivilized words．Secondly，we should call on our classmates and friends to keep away from them and say some kind words．Last but not least，we should report this problem to the related department and ask for some help．（高分句型三）Let's work together to create a peaceful and civilized network atmosphere．
Yours，
LiHua．．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假定你是李華，最近你的美國網(wǎng)友James來信和你討論"網(wǎng)絡(luò)不文明用語"的話題．請你就此給他寫封回信，寫作時注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：網(wǎng)絡(luò)不文明用語對社會造成負(fù)面影響；不利于青少年身心發(fā)展．給出可行的建議：自覺避免使用；號召周圍同學(xué)朋友不使用；向有關(guān)部門尋求幫助．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：With the development of economy隨著經(jīng)濟(jì)的發(fā)展；be addicted to對…上癮；As a result結(jié)果是；do harm to對…有害；On one hand一方面，On the other hand另一方面；have a bad effect on 對…有壞的影響；As far as I'm concerned就我而言；Last but not least最后同樣重要；
With the development of economy，more and more people become addicted to the Internet and like chatting online．（高分句型一）
On the other hand，they influence teenagers'physical and mental health，which will have a bad effect on their development．（高分句型二）
Last but not least，we should report this problem to the related department and ask for some help．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear James，
       How are you going？I miss you very much．I'm writing to you to talk about the uncivilized words used on Internet．
       With the development of economy，more and more people become addicted to the Internet and like chatting online．（高分句型一）As a result，lots of uncivilized words come into being，which can do harm to our society．On one hand，they are bad for Internet civilization．On the other hand，they influence teenagers'physical and mental health，which will have a bad effect on their development．（高分句型二）
       As far as I'm concerned，it's urgent to do something to stop their use．Firstly，as high school students，it's our duty to avoid getting involved in the use of uncivilized words．Secondly，we should call on our classmates and friends to keep away from them and say some kind words．Last but not least，we should report this problem to the related department and ask for some help．（高分句型三） Let's work together to create a peaceful and civilized network atmosphere．
                                                                                                                                                                                                     Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                     Li Hua．

點(diǎn)評 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．