Question

【題目】假定你是李華，你的英國(guó)筆友Jack對(duì)中國(guó)的鐵路很感興趣，想乘坐火車旅行。請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)提示，寫(xiě)一封書(shū)信，介紹中國(guó)鐵路系統(tǒng)。

1．火車類型：高鐵（HSR）（G）（300km／h）；

動(dòng)車（CRH）（D）（200km／h）；

快車（Express）（T／Z／K）（100km／h）；

2．火車優(yōu)點(diǎn)：安全，可以觀賞沿途風(fēng)景，省錢。

注意：

1．詞數(shù)100左右；

2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3．開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Jack,

I’m honoured that you show great interest in our trains.

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Jack,

I’m honoured that you show greal interest in our trains.Now we have three kinds of trains.The traditional one is the express train.which is slow but cheap,with etter K/T/Z marked on the ticket.Another one is CRH,running at the speed of 200 kilometers per hour,and you can see letter. However,the fastest train is HSR traveling up to 300 kilometers per hour.Their tickets are marked with letter G.

Traveling by train is safe over a long distance.Besides,you can see the beautiful scenery along the railway.It won’t cost you too much.

Looking forward to your visit to China!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】本題是提綱類作文，文體是說(shuō)明文。介紹中國(guó)鐵路系統(tǒng)，要點(diǎn)包括：1．火車類型；2．火車優(yōu)點(diǎn)。要點(diǎn)要全不能有遺漏和省略。要注意謀篇布局的順序，本文使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，描述要盡量選擇簡(jiǎn)潔的語(yǔ)言，使用自己熟悉的句式，但盡可能地使句式多樣化。

文章開(kāi)頭以一個(gè)從句引出本文的話題：I’m honoured that you show greal interest in our trains. 介紹火車的三種類型時(shí)，使用了由which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句及過(guò)去分詞作賓補(bǔ)： The traditional one is the express train. which is slow but cheap, with letter K/T/Z marked on the ticket. 接著用把兩個(gè)單句連接，同時(shí)運(yùn)用了由非謂語(yǔ)中的動(dòng)詞ing形式作定語(yǔ); Another one is CRH,running at the speed of 200 kilometers per hour和the fastest train is HSR traveling up to 300 kilometers per hour。動(dòng)詞的ing形式作主語(yǔ)：Traveling by train is safe。一個(gè)被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)：Their tickets are marked with letter G。恰當(dāng)?shù)剡\(yùn)用的連詞and，However,besides.

總之本文結(jié)構(gòu)合理，層次清晰，行文連貫。運(yùn)用了名詞從句和定語(yǔ)從句，靈活地使用了非謂語(yǔ)我多種形式及被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)。連詞運(yùn)用的也恰當(dāng)，讓文更有條理。