Question

假如你是中學(xué)生李華，你在學(xué)校隨處可見“拋拋?zhàn)濉彪S手亂扔，到處有塑料袋垃圾，有些人一邊走一邊吃一邊扔，有些“拋拋?zhàn)濉鄙踔潦窃谇鍧嵐と藙倓偳鍜哌^路面，他們跟在后面隨手就拋。你深感痛心和羞愧。請(qǐng)給校長(zhǎng)寫一封信。

1．說明寫信的目的；

2．對(duì)這些行為進(jìn)行批評(píng)；

3．提出切實(shí)可行的建議。

注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；

2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3．開頭和結(jié)束語(yǔ)已為你寫好。

Dear Mr.Headmaster,

I’m Li Hua, a student from Senior Two_________________________________________ 

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I hope my suggestions will be useful．

Yours faithfully,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

【答案】

不唯一

Possible version:

Dear Mr Headmaster,

I’m Li Hua, a student from Senior Two．I am writing to draw your attention to some improper behavior among us students—throwing waste things everywhere．Some people walked to eat while throwing garbage．Some students even throw away some wastes after the cleaners just clean up．As is known to all, waste on campus has become a more and more serious problem．I always feel painful and ashamed whenever I see this．It is obviously inappropriate for students to do this．

In order to solve the problem, some measures should be taken by our school．First, all the students are made to understand that throwing wastes freely is an unproper behavior（which results in a great waste of resources and heavy environmental pollution.）．What’s more, I wonder if our school can set up specific regulations against such behavior．I believe that the bad habit will be got rid of soon with our joint efforts．

I hope my suggestions will be useful．

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類作文，首先要認(rèn)真閱讀題目。假如你是中學(xué)生李華，你在學(xué)校隨處可見“拋拋?zhàn)濉彪S手亂扔，到處有塑料袋垃圾，有些人一邊走一邊吃一邊扔，有些“拋拋?zhàn)濉鄙踔潦窃谇鍧嵐と藙倓偳鍜哌^路面，他們跟在后面隨手就拋。你深感痛心和羞愧。請(qǐng)給校長(zhǎng)寫一封信。1．說明寫信的目的；2．對(duì)這些行為進(jìn)行批評(píng)；3．提出切實(shí)可行的建議。

需要寫的內(nèi)容已經(jīng)給出，但是寫作時(shí)不要僅僅對(duì)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行生硬的翻譯，而是要添加些內(nèi)容，使文章看起來更充實(shí)，要組成一篇通順連貫的短文。需要注意緊扣文章主題，給出的要點(diǎn)都需要包括，缺一不可，特別要注意提出切實(shí)可行的建議。寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問題。盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次。

考點(diǎn)：提綱類作文

點(diǎn)評(píng)：本文屬于提綱類作文，動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題。平時(shí)除了加強(qiáng)詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果。