Question

假設(shè)你是某一中學(xué)高中生，名字叫李華，你于2013年8月31日收到了筆友Peter的來(lái)信，請(qǐng)仔細(xì)閱讀來(lái)信，然后回復(fù)一封電子郵件告知你的朋友有關(guān)你的學(xué)校的一些情況，
內(nèi)容包括：1. 人際關(guān)系（師生關(guān)系、生生關(guān)系等）
2. 學(xué)習(xí)情況（自己學(xué)習(xí)情況、學(xué)生互助、教師指導(dǎo)等）
3. 學(xué)校課余活動(dòng)（課外文體活動(dòng)、社會(huì)實(shí)踐、興趣小組活動(dòng)等）
要求:  (1) 字?jǐn)?shù)：120左右， (2) 可適當(dāng)增加信息以使文章保持連貫。
Dear Li Hua,
Glad to hear from you last Friday. From your letter, I’ve learned a lot about Tanggu, where great changes have taken place in the past few years. It must be more beautiful than it used to be. I’m expecting to visit it sometime in the near future.
Now, I’m eager to know something about your school life. I will be delighted if you can tell me something about it.
I am looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Peter

Answer 1

One possible version:
Dear Peter,
I was so glad to receive your letter dated August 31, 2013. As you request, I’ll tell you something about my school life.
Firstly, I’ll tell you something about my teachers and classmates. My first impression of my teachers was that they are enthusiastic and friendly, and as a result, we are on good terms with each other. And there are 30 students in my class, most of whom are kind and helpful, so we get on well with each other.
Secondly, I’ll tell you something about our studies. Before class, we often preview the lessons and some other materials related to our class. In class, the teachers guide us to learn and explore the knowledge with the learning papers. After class, we always discuss in groups and try to solve the problems together.
Thirdly, we also have various after-school activities. I joined a dance club, and we practice dancing together every Tuesday. Besides there are sports meetings and parties each term. What’s more, we also have other social practice, for example, we go to the nursing house to visit the disabled children or the old people every year.
It’s really funny to be in our school. And I will be delighted if you can tell me something about your school. I’m looking forward to your reply.
Yours,   

試題分析：本文是一封回信,內(nèi)容要求是寫(xiě)自己的在校生活，包括人際關(guān)系、學(xué)習(xí)情況和課余活動(dòng)。應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，第一人稱。注意相關(guān)句式的運(yùn)用和句子之間的連貫。最后要看看字?jǐn)?shù)是否在120詞左右。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文層次分明，邏輯關(guān)系清楚，一、二、三要點(diǎn)齊全。在表述中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和較復(fù)雜的句子為文章增色不少，如be on good terms with，get on well with, for example，還有that引導(dǎo)的表語(yǔ)從句,most of whom引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句等。在行文連貫方面運(yùn)用了如so, besides，what’s more, and等，使句子之間關(guān)系緊密連貫。