Question

9．下列圖表反映的是某高中2010年與2013年學(xué)生健康狀況調(diào)查的部分?jǐn)?shù)據(jù)，請你用英語為某報寫一份報告，反映你校三年間學(xué)生健康狀況的變化情況，分析其中原因，并 提出一些改進措施．
注意事項：1．報告必須包括圖表中所有內(nèi)容，但不要逐條羅列；
  2．詞數(shù)120詞左右．開頭第一句已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
A recent survey shows that the health of the students in our school has been going from bad to worse in the past three years．

Answer 1

分析 題目要求用英文寫一份報告，反映三年間學(xué)生的健康狀況，分析原因并提出改進的措施．作文必須包含圖表中的所有內(nèi)容，不要逐條翻譯，要有一定的邏輯性和條理性．用第一人稱來寫，注意拼寫、標(biāo)點、時態(tài)和語法知識的正確運用．
【亮點說明】范文使用了大量的固定短語和固定搭配：The number of，has increased from…to，because of，the reasons for，lie in，take exercise，call for，plenty of，be paid attention to，so that，put on weight等，使作文顯得充實，有說服力；
范文注意使用while，Besides，thus，To improve students'health等來銜接上下文，做到了語意連貫；
范文還使用了一些重要的語法知識：主語從句It seems to me that…；非謂語動詞thus making students unable to spare any time…；倒裝Only in this way can students get plenty of sleep…；被動句Proper diets and exercise should also be paid attention to；目的狀語從句so that they won't easily put on weight；with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)With their heavy burdens removed等，語法知識掌握得很扎實．

解答 A recent survey shows that the health of the students in our school has been going from bad to worse in the past three years．The number of short-sighted students has increased from 77% in 2010 to 93.5% in 2013，while that of overweight students from 38% to 57.2%．（高分句型一）Nearly 15% more students don't have enough sleep because of more homework．Besides，over 21% more students become mentally unhealthy．
       It seems to me that the reasons for this lie in heavier burden of study and more homework，thus making students unable to spare any time to take exercise or have enough sleep．（高分句型二）To improve students'health，we call for less homework．Only in this way can students get plenty of sleep and be more healthy．（高分句型三）Proper diets and exercise should also be paid attention to so that they won't easily put on weight．With their heavy burdens removed，students can then keep in normal mental health．（高分句型四）

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．