Question

4．"南充是我家，文明靠大家！"作為中學(xué)生，我們應(yīng)積極參與文明城市（civilized city）的建設(shè)．請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，寫(xiě)一篇80詞左右的短文（開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）．
1．尊敬老師，對(duì)人禮貌；
2．幫助他人，友善待人；
3．遵守交規(guī)，過(guò)馬路走斑馬線，不闖紅燈；
4．保護(hù)環(huán)境，不亂扔垃圾，不亂踩草地．
【參考詞匯】
respect（尊敬）；be polite to；obey（遵守）；traffic rules；zebra crossing（斑馬線）
【要求】
1．短文應(yīng)包括所提供的信息及要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2．語(yǔ)句通順，意思連貫；
3．文中不可出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名、地名和校名；
4．請(qǐng)把文章寫(xiě)在答題卡相應(yīng)位置的橫線上．
Nanchong is now making its effort to become a civilized city．As students，what should we do？
                                           

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一
We should also help those who are in need and be friendly to the people around us我們也應(yīng)該幫助那些有需要的人，對(duì)我們周圍的人友好．這是who引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句，修飾先行詞 those．
高分句型二
When we cross the street，we should walk on the zebra crossing當(dāng)我們過(guò)馬路時(shí)，我們應(yīng)該走斑馬線．這是when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句，當(dāng)…時(shí)候．

解答 Nanchong is now making its effort to become a civilized city．As students，what should we do？【開(kāi)篇點(diǎn)明主題】
We must respect our teachers and be polite to others．We should also help those who are in need and be friendly to the people around us【高分句型一，注意定語(yǔ)從句的使用】．Besides，we must obey the traffic rules．When we cross the street，we should walk on the zebra crossing【高分句型二，注意時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句的使用】．And we mustn't go across the street when the traffic lights are red．What's more，we should protect our environment．For example，we mustn't step on the grass and climb the trees．Litter mustn't be thrown everywhere．【正文部分詳細(xì)介紹應(yīng)該怎么做】
Nanchong is our hometown．Let's try our best to make it a civilized city．【結(jié)尾緊扣主題】

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本篇寫(xiě)作需注意要求中所提供的要點(diǎn)，不可遺漏．需在平時(shí)積累相關(guān)的詞匯，多閱讀此類題材，將詞匯歸類整理；動(dòng)筆前可以按照材料內(nèi)容列出簡(jiǎn)單提綱，寫(xiě)出關(guān)鍵單詞．寫(xiě)作中注意語(yǔ)義通順，符合邏輯關(guān)系．上下文之間可以適當(dāng)使用連接詞．如but，so，then等．